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Insanity

She’s been broken by humanity;
At least, that’s how it seems.
She tightly grips the glaring knife
Hoping to end another’s life.
And as the blade so nicely gleams,
She succumbs to the insanity.

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  • oldschoolhero gold member
    October 28

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    "Hoping to end another’s life."
    if youre saying what i think your saying, youre amazing
    no way i could have written like that when i was 15? but idk
    its hard to beleive.
    maybe your not?
    do you really believe in a seperation inside yourself, between your self and what you want..
    like your the awareness behind it all? the you part is the part that watches as your body does what it wants.
    as it eats, as it stresses as it.. all that stuff?

    ????
    i realised this, only recently
    and through it, i control myself

    yeah?

    • faceless irony
      October 30

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      Oh wow, thanks. Yes, I'm 15. Almost 16, but I wrote this when I was 14. I had to grow up fast. Really fast.

      Wow, you're the first person to actually get all the meaning I put behind this. Thank you so much.

      Yeah, sometimes, I feel like I'm two different people. The one everyone else sees, and the one that I keep to myself, so that I won't burden anyone...