I said I love you
It was a joke but you didn’t know
You’re just a young and eager lover
Like a drunk, reckless driver
Heading for a heart crash.
I said I love you
And you instantly believed it’s true
You’re just a young, foolish boy
Good for a mere game, like a toy
Heading for the trash.
I said I love you
You were convinced I really do
You’re just a boy, so young and dreamy
Thinking you love and need me
Taking everything in a rush.
I said I love you
And you seemed to feel it too
You’re just a young, silly lad
Craving for something that is bad
Taking what you ought not to.
I said I love you
Why did I say so?
Was it to fool you
Or to deceive myself too
You’re just a young, foolish kid
But who am I to kid?
Am I not young myself? And as foolish?
I said I love you
But why did you believe I really do
Are you that young and foolish?
Or do you just pretend
That you believe what I say is true.
Author notes
1. The Cheater
A contest entry
- Point Of View From Both Sides by Janetheplain.
475 points, ended November 16, 5 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - A Cheating Heart... by LesbianOfLove.
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Comments
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Nice poem, Really good use of repetition on the first line of each stanza. Really good read, Thanks for entering the contest and the best of luck to you! Keep writing!
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This was an interesting poem, I really liked the line "Heading for a heart crash"
Good luck in the contest!!!!!!!!
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Love the title. Love the reoccuring lines in each stanza, ties the poem together nicely. Great write!
Best lines:
"I said I love you
It was a joke but you didn’t know
You’re just a young and eager lover
Like a drunk, reckless driver
Heading for a heart crash." -
Such delicious cruelty - how could you treat a lover so? It is to be hoped that your ploy has been 'sussed out' and the deception failed. An entertaining read indeed.
Mike
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