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breath of your name

With toes curling around the familiar boards,
I silently count the climb in my head

one
two
three
four
five

The waning heat of an October sun
is no longer strong enough to warm the old wood
beneath my bare feet
The canopy of oak encloses me in his age old arms
majestic and proud
I inhale~
The scent of summer releasing its hold

wraps me in a dappled haze.
Like the web spun by the spider trembling in the evening breeze,
I cling to corners of old memories

and a ghost that was your voice.


Hollow on warm lips,

I whisper your name to the leaves.





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  • sweet arrival gold member
    November 10

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    you have not lost your touch in the least. the softness that floats from you is like no other, and i can close my eyes and be there, letting the whispers come off my lips as well, but with a different name taken on the winds.
    the familiar things can bring that warmth we need of just knowing.

    and as leaves spin in the air and collect on the ground, that name will be like jumping into the pile gathered beneath our bodies and our whisper will silence to nothing.

    i sigh... truly.


    • Daizee silver member
      November 10
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      You get it like no other. I always know that you will


  • poetryality silver member
    November 10

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    This is beauteous! Your words trap the reader in wonder. You have a way of doing that without specific intent, and with great ease. This is lovely and worthy of many accolades. I am left breathless!


    Much Love ♥

    Renee

    • Daizee silver member
      November 10
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      Thanks Renee. I'm always left with the best ponders after I read your poetry. I hold your opinion in very high regard.

  • heylookaneuphemism
    November 10

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    I always enjoy the experience of something familiar becoming something new. You've taken such a mundane thing, stairs, and given me pause......what do I think of as I go about and do those things so often taken for granted....There is a lovely meloncholy residing in this piece, and your close is stunning, so eloquent. I enjoy your writing.

    • Daizee silver member
      November 10
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      I love that about poetry~ the mundane being written with words that paint us a brand new picture. Love being transported into someone's head and looking through their eyes. I'm glad you enjoyed this


  • Cannonsfire
    November 10

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    Been a while my friend since you wrote and this is hauntingly beautiful C


    • Daizee silver member
      November 10
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      It has been a while. Thank you for your sweet words. It feels good to write again....


  • thepoetssoul
    November 9

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    A wonderful piece of poetry with a dash of haunting beauty.
    Really really good, be blessed in all you do.
    Smile brightly

    Tony


  • Rend the Veil gold member
    November 6

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    such sweet gentle words to wake to
    i really adore your work, sss
    how can one just not be in awe of your work

    love to you my sissy

    Rend


  • Lowell Poe
    November 4

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    Lass....dont ever say i dont know what im doing...lol
    this is why i ask your thoughts...
    because of your stunning and starkly beautiful poetry.

    The scent of summer releasing its hold
    wraps me in a dappled haze.
    Like the web spun by the spider trembling in the evening breeze,
    I cling to corners of old memories
    and a ghost that was your voice.


    Good lord little gypsy....
    reading this softly is almost like praying..
    your obviouse talent blows me away...
    this is why it is like chritmas morn
    when i see your sweet comments besides my work...
    the title alone is hot and poetic...
    your really something lass....
    a true gypsy angel poet you will always be in these old Irish eyes,..
    i luv your heart lass
    cause that where all your work comes from.

    Bless you always,
    Liam


    • Daizee silver member
      November 4
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      You humble me with your generous words and leave me speechless. 'Thank you' seems so insignificant, but I DO thank you for your sweet, sweet words.


      Always,
      Stacy


  • manatee
    November 2

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    Wistfully intoxicating poetry, a cool refreshing drink that can't help but make addicts of us all. -The Manatee

  • Rowan gold member
    November 2

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    sighs...
    this one is even more haunting, than the one I read prior. You do nostalgia, and poignancy beautifully Daizee.


    • Daizee silver member
      November 2
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      thanks..and love the hat in your pic

      • Rowan gold member
        November 2
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        lol, dressed as a witch for work. My skin was actually more green, but pic
        is over exposed I'd say. oh well.

  • Clelia
    November 1

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    As a web, those old memories clinging are really some very great lines!


  • pixiestix gold member
    November 1

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    Absolutely beautiful from start to finish.

    So nice to see your words on the page again.


  • Dalaney gold member
    October 31

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    I think this is my favorite poem by you...it's extraordinarily beautiful.

    Love, L

    • Daizee silver member
      October 31
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      Sometimes it's easier to find the words than others... this time the words just seemed there...

      Thank you...


  • crivanea silver member
    October 30

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    ohhh..it been ages since you write..and in this poem..like those ghostly whispers heard by the leaves...i hear too the softness of this piece..beautifully done


    • Daizee silver member
      October 31
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      Thank you for your sweet comment. I hope you're doing good


  • Catie Sheeran gold member
    October 30

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    This is very beautiful. I love autumn and I love your imagery and I felt like I was there feeling what you were feeling. I love it


  • cubert
    October 30

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    Very evocative piece. I have a head full of dappled shadows and ache. Other feelings, too lol, but it's making my thoughts too duuuuh to explain right now. Suffice to say, I will read this one many times.


  • DeJaBlue
    October 30

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    Another stunner
    Must you always take our breath away?


    • Daizee silver member
      October 30
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      Oohh love your new pic! As long as you continue breathing.. lol


  • Ellegirl silver member
    October 29

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    Lovely poem. You've spun a web of beautiful images with your words.


    • Daizee silver member
      October 29
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      It's easy to write from those images this time of year

      Thank you for your sweet words


  • heaven all alone
    October 29

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    ah! i loveee this!

    haven't heard from you in a while, hope all is well!


    • Daizee silver member
      October 29
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      aww I'm glad you liked it
      I've been gone for a bit but I found my pen again.. good to hear from you


  • Garmond gold member
    October 29

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    Such a sense of delicate, drifting movements of thought born from lingering ghosts of memory. Your weaving of nature is simply gorgeous throughout this and brings each line to life.
    It's so good to read your magic words and thoughts again.


  • Dajuan
    October 29

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    just the title alone, is very elegant

    Calm tone, as a new season has approach.Beautiful from beginning to end.


  • Matt E. Smith gold member
    October 29

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    very soft just like that whisper. beautiful.

    write more


  • John BoSox
    October 29

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    Very lovely..great imagery..so soft and beautiful..I can really feel your emotions coming through.Great thought expression..You nailed this..congrats


    John


  • Ariosto II. gold member
    October 29

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    October..late fall, when colors give way to old dreams.
    This is lovely and melancholy

    it can be both

    nice one dear

    d


    • Daizee silver member
      October 29
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      Thanks David... I love fall for many reasons

  • Rowan gold member
    October 29
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    What a mesmorizing write Stacy, I could almost feel the autumn sunlight, and it's been cloudy here for days...
    sighs. Welcome home. winks


    • Daizee silver member
      October 29
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      thanks... maybe my poem will conjure some sunshine here too lol

  • Bruce silver member
    October 29

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    Ahhhh...You're back with a vengence! This is absolutely beautiful. You are a master of mood. (not to say that you're moody! lol)


    • Daizee silver member
      October 29
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      I'm probably moody too..but i AM female... lol

      Thanks for your kindness Bruce... I've missed you.


  • glenn shannon silver member
    October 29

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    gee Stacey you come back with a mighty powerful briliant piece here indeed i dint know weather to melt or freeze brilliant hun i loved it welcome home too you were so missed hug glenn


    • Daizee silver member
      October 29
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      I missed you too Glenn. It's good to be back and hear from you


  • Cup-a-Joe
    October 29

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    It's so good to read your words again. If you leave a gain i will personally come to Ill and give you my ink pen.

    ~~The scent of summer releasing its hold

    wraps me in a dappled haze.
    Like the web spun by the spider trembling in the evening breeze,
    I cling to corners of old memories

    and a ghost that was your voice.~~
    I love absolutely love the imagery in this one.
    What a way to knok my socks off.

    Joe


    • Daizee silver member
      October 29
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      Aww thanks Joe. Bring a pencil with a good eraser. I'm always so indecisive lol

      Always,
      Stacy


  • Pure Thought silver member
    October 28

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    worth the wait

    ... and the leaves softly applaude
    the beauty you are, and the love you release
    to their care, which makes them cling to the branch
    all winter, in your honor


    • Daizee silver member
      October 28
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      no fair making me cry
      I'm humbled..completely.

      • Pure Thought silver member
        October 28
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        Just what your words tickled loose from my muse.
        See, I don't feel I write anty where near this well. I think I like the images, generally missing in my poems. You present feelings and images, something for the mind to look at, as well as, feel.

        • Daizee silver member
          October 28
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          My words come to me in colors and images but your words lay your heart right open and invite us into your mind. There is no greater example of feeling than that.


          • Pure Thought silver member
            October 28
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            we could go on like this all night ... or not
            I will simply say thank you Stacy.

            Night
            Buddy


  • Carolina Moon gold member
    October 28

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    I see you definitely haven't lost your touch or talent dear one.. I've missed your mesmerizing words. Absolutely beautiful as is the imagery. Keep that pen smokin'..don't make us wait so long to read your next work of art

    • Daizee silver member
      October 28
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      I was holding my breath that my words wouldn't run out before the ideas left my mind... muse can be such a bitch! It must be female LOL
      Thank you, my friend. It feels good

      • Carolina Moon gold member
        October 28
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        Lmao You said that right..my damn muse is pms'ing too I think. I would shoot it, but that might leave a mark.


        • Daizee silver member
          October 28
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          and it's definitely not worth the loss of blood.. lol


  • Rend the Veil gold member
    October 28
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    smooth, soft sereen, love your imagery
    sis ss you are an amazing Poet!
    ~sighs~

    love and blessings

    Rend


    • Daizee silver member
      October 28
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      Aww thanks Rend. You know I hold you in high regard

      Stacy

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