Silent glass....
glitters on the floor....
Broken butterfly's wings....
graced with blood so pure.....
laced in gentle rose petals....
sewn to the stem of life....
Sweet little thoughts....
trace a hearts beat.......
beating in it's breaks...
and laced with grace......
Gods sewn a gentle swan....
Into a lake of pain....
heartless people smile in joy......
A butterfly's wings heal,
the broken heart.....
Lacing it with strings of gold.....
Tracing it with shards of diamond.....
Thoughts growing in your heart....
A contest entry
- Filthy Beautiful by VoltaicHypnosis.
600 points, ended November 12, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Unfortunately, the use of an apparent ellipsis does not really qualify this as a dirrty pretty piece nor does the real content of the poem. But this is a nice poem with a very strong emotional message.
Thank you for sharing.
- Bean Sidhe -
I thought
this is a very beautiful . it has grace and as the reader read your words you could feel the passion that went into this . I like the part when you say butterfly wings heal, the broken heart. you did an outstanding job on this keep it flowing and never let the ink run dry. And i think it is great just the way it is and good luck in the contest
sincerly, your poeit
friend angel
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Much more poetic than most entries, but not Dirty Pretty. No matter, though, it is still a strong contender, at the very least for an HM.... beautiiful write, best of luck to you... -
its a beautiful work
it shows a world tjhat not many perseive
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the way you wrote this is really interesting, [=
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