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Emerald lights

 

 

Perceptions wake upon sunlight's demise
I stand in awe, pure trance envoked
spectrum's rise of crystal colours
as ripples of translucent shimmers

souls form in hues of emerald
softly sway and blend to red

A subtle hint of twilight's splendors
swirling as the star light twinkles
in harmony dancing, floating,

soaring over head....

reflections of these moments
to reminisce upon the morrow

 

 

 

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  • Darmok
    November 11

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    in person

    If I were to see such a site in person, I would probably feel a sence of dejavu having read this lucid poem. And wonder, yes.....are there earth bound souls in the midst of this, embellished radiance of magnetic personalities

    Darmok


  • Fallen-Thumper
    November 11

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    thank you for entering

    I really like this piece, the words just flowed off the page and had amazing imagery, just fantastic, great write and a wonderful read. Good luck and thanks for entering!
    -penguin-


  • Garmond gold member
    November 3

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    I love your opening stanza Darky.... it is spectacular... and sets up the feel for the rest of the piece. A true pleasure to read.


  • Maili Knephthan gold member
    November 2

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    "
    Perceptions wake upon sunlight's demise
    I stand in awe, pure trance envoked
    spectrum's rise of crystal colours
    as ripples of translucent shimmers"


    lThis has to be my favorite stanza but ENVOKED should be INVOKED. Other then this it was well done I love the write. Thank you for sharing.


  • redmoonnrizing silver member
    October 29

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    Your poem really compliments the image shown...a beautiful piece shimmering with a rainbow of colors...really amazing!!!


  • Jayde1
    October 29

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    wow

    what an amazing write you have penned here...
    considering the time it took you to write this...
    you wrote a beautiful poem...
    you have such an amazing way with words my dear..

    loved this stanza...

    A subtle hint of twilight's splendors
    swirling as the star light twinkles
    in harmony dancing, floating,

    soaring over head....




    to be fair thought the whole thing rocked
    and I wanted to copy into my comment the whole poem coz lets be fair...

    Its all awesome...


    well done my beautiful WIFE.....

    I love you loads


    Your HUBBY

    Jayde


  • The Drifter
    October 29

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    Twilight is a very special time for me. When the rises and the stars pop out so brillently. A time when shadows dance with the cool breeze. Any colors seen in the dark being so stark. I like your poem. Thank you for sharing your thoughts.


  • Concrete Angel silver member
    October 28

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    Simply beautiful. Every word in this has such a light, magical feel to it. I could see the lights just dancing away in the sky.

    A subtle hint of twilight's splendors
    swirling as the star light twinkles
    in harmony dancing, floating,
    soaring over head....

    That's the stanza that really brings this poem to life and sends the images dancing through the mind. Wonderfully penned as always


  • twelfthknight silver member
    October 28

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    Beautifully written with wonderful imagery I loved the lines

    souls form in hues of emerald
    softly sway and blend to red

    Thank you for entering and good luck


  • Oh.My.Juliet
    October 28
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    beautiful!! good luck!

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