and in the empty spaces
I see you in broken bird’s wings
broken bird’s wings
that you mended
with cold fingers
hoping that someday
someone might
take you in their hands
like that
and show you how to fly
Author notes
pieces of a poem
for a dear friend
...tada...
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I love this. It almost reminds me of the song Blackbird by the Beatles. Anyways, it's fantastic.
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smiles. Thank you!
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I understand this piece intimately. It is a beautiful write. To not just escape from something bad, but to something better.
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A gentle, sweet, amd well written poem. Sort of mystical, the magic touch of healing. Above all else learn to heal first. "Show you how to fly", such imagery, I enjoyed it very much. Thank you for sharing your poem of great feelings.
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i like it. altho for some reason i can't piece together what i tmeans right now, but i think ti's because i'm tired and a bit befuddled from work ing all day, but i liked the way it sounded, and maybe tomorrow i'll try to wrap my brain around it
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smiles. thanks Joe. I appreciate your reading and sharing your thoughtful comment.
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I like it...i like the longing...like, it's "i'll do what i can, do my part, but ultimately i need help too" ....at least, thats how i saw it
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smiles. I like your thoughts. thanks for commenting dear.
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oh stop being so damn good.
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blushes... thanks for the comment.
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This is beautiful Bree. In the empty spaces... nice and mysterious opening line. I like it very much.
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thanks mike. smiles.
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The more I consider this the more I like it. In my opinion this piece is built around the idea that a poet's job is not to arbit the world or anything glamorous like that but to fix themselves, that poetry is a way to mend one's own "broken bird's wings" but even if the mending is complete a person still can't fly
"take you in their hands
like that" - best image out of this. Sparse yet it is filled with intensity and compassion and yearning. Verrry good work.
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I like your thoughts on this piece. Thanks for leaving such a thoughtful comment. I'm glad you enjoyed this. smiles.
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I like the lack of obvious connection between the title and the body of the poem. The urge to overtly connect the two is too often unresistable for many poets (though sometimes it is necessary/approrpriate).
I like the hinting, the vague wanting of this work. You might try reading this once aloud as is and then do it again removing the last two words "to fly." I'm not saying it will be better, but something felt interesting about such an experiment. Not sure if anything will come of it.
Again, great stuff.
IC C
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smiles, thanks for another sweet and thoughtful comment sir.
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