can i lie in your bed,
naked?
insult you with
cute eyes, lie
about things i don't
know;
grow up in intervals,
de-age at adult moments,
use words you've
never heard before,
ignore your compliments;
be indecisive, make fun
of your attempts
to be romantic,
laugh at inappropriate times,
may i fuck you?
i could pile you
up like fallen leaves.
oh honey,
i could be that good.
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A contest entry
- For my Favorites and by Invite ONLY by Not-The-Sun.
2000 points, ended November 12, 25 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
be honest. I won't put you on my ignore list. :)
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Whoever this poem is directed to won't know what hit 'em and I don't think they'll be complaining.
Very creative use of the contest prompt and I love the title in context with the poem. It sort of reminds me of the expression "knock your socks off" except far more poetic.
Great penning and congrats on the bronze.
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lol thank you. and no...he hasn't complain thus far in our relationship.
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man this poem really hit me. love it.
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brilliant; I see that you clearly thought a lot about the prompt and how you were going to set up the poem to get just the right tone out of it. every word is meticulously placed and artistically creative. the bluntness of simple words has never jumped off a page more. the first two stanzas and last two are my favorite, but the rest of the piece is just as essential to the overall atmosphere I get when I read this. thank you so much for entering!!!
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oh my fuckin lord ... this piece was amazing ... why didnt you write it for my contest ... i am in love ...
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thank you.
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oh my fuckin lord ... this piece was amazing ... why didnt you write it for my contest ... i am in love ...
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damn.
i love it all.
what a beginning.
made me smile.
shit.
it's just all so good.
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BOOKMARKED. wow...
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thank you.
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