My mind spins 'round and 'round,
My head goes spinning to the ground.
Find some comfort in your head,
Before this Earth is turned to lead.
For if you're fully alive you'll feel your soul set fire.
Your brain crushed in this cursing blaze,
Your soul stuck in a blasted maze.
For if you're fully alive you'll feel your soul set fire.
Time will not be spoken,
All you bones will be broken.
For if you're fully alive you'll feel you soul set fire.
Shouts turn to whispers,
Screams turn to blisters.
For if you're fully alive you'll feel your soul set fire.
A contest entry
- 13 options. Something for Everyone!!! by iamthebeatles.
1200 points, ended November 9, 2009, 23 entries
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oh my god. i am absolutly im love with this. everythign about it is so pure and palpable. so realistic and amazing its unbelieveable. i am deeply astonished. i am in LOVE with the line "for if your fully alive you'll feel your soul set fire" it drips with beauty! this is amazing. DROP DEAD GORGEOUS
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this poem is wonderfully written, but i think (if you even care) that if you divided this into stanzas, (each ending in the set fire line) it would really add emphasis to it and make your poem that much better. Anyway, I still love this. great words.
peace
Cassie -
For if you're fully alive you'll feel your soul set fire.
Time will not be spoken,
All you bones will be broken.
I loved these lines.
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