you are exactly like every other piece of shit man,
you're just as scared and spineless as all the others,
leaving and running away;
why can't anyone fight and stay?
doesn't anybody get the meaning of love,
of sticking it out,
or trying?
you couldn't try for me,
you couldn't even love me for me,
you are nothing, useless, a disgrace...
another faded tear in my sea of pain,
another memory lost in the pieces of my heart,
another reason to wonder what's wrong with me...
another ache when I breathe.
and you were supposed to be different,
you promised never to hurt me..
but don't they all?
and then you fall,
are they there to catch you?
never;
even when they've promised you forever.
and I loved you enough to give you my heart,
to let you have that vulnerable part of my soul;
the part I tried to hold back but I couldn't...
and you smashed it,
threw it on the ground like it was nothing.
too late,
I'd already made you everything...
and I thought I was something
in the end, to you, I wasn't enough;
I was nothing.
now I'm nothing.
I'm just broken, broken, broken...
aren't I always this way?
this lost, mourning soul, wondering where I lost it all,
wandering for something more.
you were more,
but you weren't real.
and I guess nothing was real...
but how I felt was...
the spilled pool of the depth of my emotion for you,
it was full...
and you didn't want it.
you didn't want me.
did you ever?
and like the blind fool I am,
I look over my shoulder...
I look back,
hoping to see you coming for me;
but you never come...
I waste away waiting for you to want me.
when you don't,
when you won't...
they never chase you.
not if you're not worth it.
and I'm not...
I'm nothing; nothing worth chasing...
and that's all I really wanna be,
is someone you'll chase,
someone you'll fight for...
someone you'll follow...
I just want to be someone.
Be brutally honest [but nice..]!
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Loved it
wow, such an emotive poem it came across as really raw.. i love that so much emotion went into and it still flowed really well. it was captivating to read, i liked the line "another reason to ache when i breathe", lovely poem xx
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i enjoyed reading ..and loving it!!!
heartbreaking....could feel your emotion...beautifully written...
keep on writing...
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i really love this . . i really feel ur emotion tho . . but i guess guys just have tht effect dont they? . . .
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I love this piece, although I'd like to point out that theres quite a few typos in there ^^ ''others one'' uhhh ''Other ones''? xD
But you really showed your emotion in this, and I could feel the anger you felt.
(revise please)
Great write,
Joshua
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"another reason to wonder what's wrong with me...
another ache when I breathe.
and you were supposed to be different,
you promised never to hurt me..
but don't they all?
and then you fall,
are they there to catch you?
never;
even when they've promised you forever."
this piece is emotionally stunning and honest
I loved every word of it, but mostly that part. I understand where you are coming from : )
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thanks <3
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I've read this several times, and each time it brings a lot of emotion out. You are very talented. The flow is lovely, and the subject while depressing definitely comes through.
You are amazing no matter what, and you are someone to somebody.
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you are beautiful~you are special~and you are amazing~
and I don't want you to forget that.You are someone
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i love this poem. its one of the better "broken" poems that i have read on this site. you did a fantastic job, and got your message off so pleasntly. each line, filled with such emotion and sadness, you really did write this well. i know exactly how you are feeling. again, wonderful job. and keep writing! its a good way to vent!
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I love this- I know what you mean, I can even relate this to friendships. Keep it up. you are great
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Nice personal write I can relate to too well. So many reasons why love doesnt last, if only there was one answer.
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Tell nothing but the brutal truth. Which you did. And I liked it; it was powerful, emotional and imaginative even though countless poems have been about heartbreak. Yours stood out above them though, even if I can't quite put my finger on why.
Really, really spectacular! Especially that last line:
I just want to be someone.
Don't we all.
Reallly fab!
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This was very powerful, Austyn. This expressed powerful emotion and was heartbreaking. This is one of my favorite poems by you. It's just so honest and real. So often, I've wondered that in my life, when people promise you forever and then walk away, it seems like everything was fake from the beginning. Sometimes it's hard to tell who is for real anymore in this crazy world. Keep that pen flowing. I love your writes.
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Very powerful Austyn. And heartbreaking. I wish you'd write more. I love reading your poetry.
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