The raven lands on the house’s gutter, uttering a caw of retribution.
Quite aware of the alcohol fueled fire inside
Sobriety once again gives way to “the suicide solution.”
Another family to divide.
Fuchsia stars in his vision.
“Don’t hit girls,” his final decision
Besides, a man cannot be beaten by a wife
But a hurled candy dish, hurts like an inserted, hot, dull knife.
A contest entry
- Breaking Up Is Hard To Do But...It beats the hell out of having someone beat the hell out of you! by Gypsy Via Orleans.
800 points, ended November 8, 9 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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bravo.....nice o see this side of the sorry story aired
and you did it with such skill...nice wite indeed
T
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WOW!!!!
There are always two sides to each coin. I love how you show it is not always a man that does the abusing. That eye is a story all by itself. You've done a brilliant job of capturing the prompt and my attention. Thanks for your entry and good luck.
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You know Women can be the abuser just as much as men
I have seen it and witnessed it all.
I just loved that last line! I do believe it was my fav
Although i wouldnt want to get hit with a hurled candy dish
That guys eye looks like it hurts.
Great poem!
Good luck in the contest!
Mandi
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Well it seems you've captured the prompt perfectly with this write.
Your opening line is just great...I love it.
Though not spoken of too often...women can be the abusers in a relationship, so you have done well to highlight this.
Owwww ....that injury looks painful!!!
Excellent piece.
Well done.
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