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The Winds of October


The Winds of October

October now dark how you glower
What have you done with your lovely coat
It is lying wet and soggy now
Trodden down by every passing sole

I gave you my magic money
Given to me from the goodness of peoples' hearts
When I played music on the street
Do you still have your orange tabby

I like the way you take care of her
Pumpkin is a good name for her
Do you suppose if we were mice
She would eat us and put us out of our misery

What have you done with your coat
Are you so much like October
What I have written I have written
I have sown what I have sown

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  • Wesley Storer
    November 4
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    Hello Umi. Thank you for the comment on "The Winds of October." Such an encouraging comment.


  • Umi Juvariel
    November 3

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    The second stanza stands out the most to me. This poem to a friend or lover is so sweet, and it is nice to see someone who writes their poem so beautifully with their heart. Excellent write and please keep up the beautiful poetry!