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Lost in the wind

Sands of time told
Stories of forgotten lore
Of images carved in stone
And washed by the muddy river

Emancipating age from within
Depths of timeless remnants
Evicting the shame from its halls
A dynasty they called home

Insist on burning ages

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Prompt # 2

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  • HereComesTheSun
    October 31

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    great last line
    i feel you did the poem justice with that last line.

    thanks for entering


  • rrw gold member
    October 30

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    This poem will probably be the the shortest piece being only 9 lines long. And it shows us all how to pack an explosion of concise and exciting thought into a small package... This touches me on at a very basic level of human existence... the concept of individuality creating an ultimate universe! I hope I ain't gettin' too weird but I find this piece quite profound.

    Emancipating age from within
    Depths of timeless remnants
    Evicting the shame from its halls
    A dynasty they called home

    This stanza really gets to me since I am an "old guy" and often feel that it IS liberating to examine my life... what good and bad I have done with it. A freeing from the prison of age. Don't know if that was your intent, but that's what I got from it. Great Job!