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you still win.

perched on the silky oak
shakes but never falls
flows like a river
floats with the wind
breaks down but for a cause

hope hope and hope more
for prayers bring it alive again
still young and green
alive and ringing
its all hidden somewhere beneath

inside the core of a healthy heart
shines strong when given a thought
faith dipped in positive light
it may test your will and might
give into it and you still win.


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  • FallingRainDrop
    November 22
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    this is absolutly amazing. love "flows like a river
    floats with the wind
    breaks down but for a cause" simply beautifyl.thanks so much for sharing! :]


  • little-hug
    November 17

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    So beautiful and hopeful! This is exactly what I was hoping for from this contest! I love your use of imagery. Thank you so much for entering my contest. Best of luck now and always!


  • yellowsub
    November 11

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    I love the second stanza the most. Especially...

    "alive and ringing
    it's all hidden somewhere beneath"

    It's very thought provoking. I love the ambiguity in the first stanza.


  • Denerica silver member
    October 29

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    That's right and amen! Love the last stanza especially. Inspiring words. Well done. Blessings.


  • wave1080
    October 28

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    Thanks

    All I need is hope , beautifully written

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