I am not saying
it is that predictable –
though the sun’s hollow promises
disguised in golden strings
granted me
visions of misfortune
before they unfold
So it is a whole day of the past ahead of me
and a whole day of hope retiring to exhaustion
But I do value life –
like a man’s appetite for sex
after a draining orgasm
Author notes
Prompt: "Diminished"
A contest entry
- One Word Prompt #9 by Diminished Capacity.
1075 points, ended November 1, 15 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Your ending was absolutely awesome. Though the entire piece screams greatness. Thank you so much for entering.
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Thank you for the comment.
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Your premise evokes
the principle of satiety,
a cure for insomnia,
and a non-stop
intriguing mind.
Quite the fascinating piece!!!!!
M-C
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I'm afraid you're right. LOL.
Thanks.
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This is so fantastic. Those closing lines... wow. I'm currently a crumpled mess on the floor, because this made me think of things that take my strength away. And I'm telling you that not to make you feel bad - but because you should know how powerful this piece is. Well done
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Haha. Thanks.
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I am with you dear heart.. for i could sleep a week if the night stayed and the sun sleep for this old tired soul needs rest..for the vision displayed on the diminished rest will carry this thought in mind to seek.. this is stunning dear heart for you have penned a mans insight for the taste he needs for rest.. Hugs always and smiles for this is awesome hugs always Angel♥♥
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Thanks again Angel.
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