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This is It!

So this is it,
I'm here at last,
all earthly pleasures
in the past.

Life tempted me,
that was it's aim,
a little fun
a lot of pain.

And looking back,
if I could choose,
to have my youth
and wisdom lose.

I'd laugh and say,
begone dull care,
I would be foolish
going there.

For stress and pain,
have carved in me,
an emptiness
which makes me free.

Free from the need
to prove myself,
for I have found
a deeper wealth.

And in that vast
and empty space,
where in I live
and feel Gods grace.

I seem to find
my home at last,
all doubt, all questions
in the past.



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It's only after you lose everything, that you are free to do anything

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  • pixiestix gold member
    November 4

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    The word "emptiness" stands out in this write for me David. For many it has a negative connotation, meaning whatever it is referring to is lost gone but we know better. Being able to put down all the baggage we carried through life is an appealing thought. Also, in the study of tai chi I learned that through emptiness comes great power and heightened awareness along with the sense of freedom.

    Truly an insightful and well written piece.

  • Macsword
    October 29

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    Exactly

    Free from the need
    to prove myself,
    for I have found
    a deeper wealth.


    Your poem is a quick read but there is much said in the quickness. It is a good write poet.

  • writer4christ
    October 28

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    wow ive never written a poem about the after life before but i would like to when one of my parents pass away when im older.This is very beautiful and life is very challenging and difficult but its worth living for when you reach heaven
    great job!!
    -heather rios

    • sleepinglion
      October 29
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      Thankyou so much for such lovely comments, I can remember(just) how it felt to be your age. You have great change in front of you, but I am sure your faith will carry you through.
      David


  • drifting cloud silver member
    October 28

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    The past. hmm.. the past. It was fun while it lasts. --- NO, I don't think I really want to go through it all again. I have learned so much and don't want to loose it. The past, I won't look back, I'll continue down my path. -- Bonita

    • sleepinglion
      October 28
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      Yes indeed Bonita, there was fun amongst the pain, like roses among thorns. When we reachedout for the flower, we generally got more than we expected. Thanks for reading
      David


  • Pisces rainbow gold member
    October 28

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    Yes it is

     

    we spend a life time being in love,

    we love our youth

    we love the hope of the future

    we are surrounded by love ones

    safe and secure

     

     

    liitle by little

    we lose what we love

    creates an enormous pain

    so we don't want to go there ever again

     

    we become detached from the world

    it is not depressions

     

    through loss and pain we see the child in the candy store

    it becomes for a better word silly.

    wisdom is born 

     

    I hope I have't translated wrong 

    this has been my experience

     

     

    this is our true home

    when we no longer love things of the world

    we find everlastiing love

     

     

    'great' write David

     

    God bless you my friend...

    *

    • sleepinglion
      October 28
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      You hit the nail on the head there Kathy, Its a good place to be, there is no gowing back, thankyou as ever
      david

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