Tanned October leaves
blown into heaps against trees -
Autumn detritus
wind blown carpeting
a mosaic of burnished bronze
underneath my feet
glisten in the rain
like wet fish in the market -
I button my coat.
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Evocative haiku mosaic of images, leaves a trace of retinal fish floating in my eye bowls.
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Bravo!
I love this 
as much as the first. You have such an elegant way of bringing forth your imagery!
wind blown carpeting
a mosaic of burnished bronze
What a marv blending of picturesque words!
glisten in the rain
like wet fish in the market
Who would've thought of this scene to depict rain soaked leaves? Not I for sure...
Brilliant Dave. 
Way to go! 
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I 'pinched' (sort of) the wet fish from one of my favourite Basho poems.
Fish shop -
how cold the lips
of the salted bream.
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Holy Mackerel, Batman! Did someone say <:}}}}}}}}< ?
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Wow...way cool ~ that fish! I never saw that before. Is it an original? No matter. It's great.
for this! 
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Fish?
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Great work poet!
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Thanks. I thought the original 'Leaves' was ok, but you know a work of art is never finished but merely abandoned.
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