It was the frost in his eyes
i saw first
maybe i should have been more aware
of the coldness
in his heart.
but those eyes
killed me.
Author notes
A contest entry
- Quickie NOWWW baby!!! # 34 by Mango Memories.
400 points, ended October 28, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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This was beautifully written.
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bravo!!
So provocative. Really like your take on the prompt. You have injected so much feeling in these few spare lines. Like this one.
ivoire
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I dont know why you didnt receive a shiney
for this beautiful piece of Art!!
but you should have here let me hug you
sss
love and blessings
Rend
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This is wonderful hun. It sent shivers down my spine...Great work...Best wishes in the contest.
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You are on a roll...
powerful, makes me wonder who it is in relation to you.
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OK... first off great poem i feel something was missing out of this poem to but it was still good you forgot to Cap your I's thank you for sharing keep up the great work
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This is beautiful Joe. The disclaimer in the notes isn't necessary.
Love,
Amera
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hahah had to laugh at your author notes, are you sure ummmm
liked it, and the more of these you do the better you get... this is great for someone who doesnt normally enter quickies...
Cheers
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Thanks, I am trying .lol It would help if i had a brain.
Joe
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Nicey done
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Thanks Miss Mangos. cool contest.
Joe
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Bah; I prefer Gay guys. But the poem is good - the AN's are little unnecessary though.
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I will deleate them then. Thanks for reading.
Joe
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I really loved this. You did a great job writing it.
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Thank you. I don't do well on these .
I am off to read yours.
Joe
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