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The Sorrowful Plight of Barrister Honeycut

Her latest lover, William, is a lazy boy,
who draws pictures on the sidewalk with colored chalk
and sleeps wherever his head happens to fall -
she loves him, in fact, needs him to breathe, but I ask you,
how can you love someone who says your poetry is
read only by foppish old men and women who smell
like petunias?

I utterly loathe him, yet -

when he walks into a room, she becomes golden,
an orb of light so serene I can barely look at her without
making the sign of the holy cross, illuminated sighs
fill the air, and her eyes, oh, her eyes are as blue
as a newborn sky on a crisp fall morning,
and her smile radiates a warmth so sweet and lush,
no fruit in any garden would taste as delicious.

Her poetry, the words I have fed upon for so long,
now remains silent in a closed drawer, locked away, while this William,
this boy with no talent whatsoever, curls against her
like an infant, asking questions a baboon would know the answers to,

as I sit by, thinking of ways to get rid of his body -
I sadly admit, I am cursed to love her from afar,
but must I suffer being the bump on a rhino’s arse because of him?

No!  I shall steal her away for however long it takes,
plead my case (I am a barrister, after all) and kiss her lashes
until it is only my face she sees, my hands she feels upon her skin,
my words that bewitch her beneath a trellis of stars -
ah, my thoughts have wandered once more, my heart is heavy,
and now William the Wanker, has declared an end to the evening
with a yawn born out of eternal boredom, rudely loud, I might add.

Love, love, love -
it has made warriors into weaklings, intellects into fools, and kings
into common beasts, and as I walk this lonely street, I realise that I, too,
have fallen under its serendipitous spell; I will never again be as I was
for the want and desire of her, my lady, my divine poetess by the sea -
I take one last look up to the window where candle light quivers
and I bid a silent, adieu.



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Author notes

don't ask me where this came from...just playing around and having fun on a very stormy night   Will the Barrister ever win over his poetess?  hmmmm...we shall see 

 

Given to Jeff aka Cricketjeff, with love and thanks

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  • PerVirtuous
    2 hours ago
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    I shall have to keep my eye on Wimpole street!


  • MelloYello1725
    November 3
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    Wow!

  • cloverbarbie1028
    November 3
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    I loved this keep up the good work


  • Melissa Burns
    October 31

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    I don't usually read the popular picks but this was very good and I'm glad I stopped by was nice to read a little story Great work!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!


  • Acqua Mossa
    October 29
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    nice one.

  • been a while and i have to say i do miss talking with you, this is a strong and honestly good read, i hope to see more and glad to see your pen is still going, keep it flowing


  • Ariosto II. gold member
    October 29

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    Jeepers lane, where did this one come from?
    Barrister Honeycut is in a bad place...
    Willie the wanker?..lemme picture this.
    (Don't trust those sidewalk scribblers, they are all winos and dope fiends!)

    Nothing like a change of pace though to get the muses active again.
    Maybe I should right a sonnet about Gretchen the Milkmaid's fixation on
    that doddering old coot who whistles nursery rhymes outside the Parish Church.

    hmmm..might work

    Neat read for the Season

    BOO!

    to you


  • nordicsky silver member
    October 29

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    Thanks for posting this wonderful write, poetry like this can brighten up even my gloomiest day.
    I love the exciting and interesting way you weave colloquial sayings into your poetry... “must I suffer being the bump on a rhino’s arse” whatever next?

    Take care
    Life is good
    Love, Peter


  • Cannonsfire
    October 29

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    Stories are the food of life and you write them better than most C


  • SandyToo
    October 28

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    A very compelling and fun read.
    I love the imagination in this, and the humour.
    Well done!


  • Pure Thought silver member
    October 28

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    Ah, my dear Lady, I know from whence it came.
    A tale spun like the finest silk into a most exquisite kimono like wrap. A thing of beauty, replete with pictures and a grand story line.

    Buddy

    • Dalaney gold member
      October 28
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      My King Thank you for your very poetic and kind comment. I am working on something now I think you might like....we shall see

      Love, LL


      • Pure Thought silver member
        October 28
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        My Lady Lane,
        You have never written anything I didn't like, ever.


  • Rob. gold member
    October 28

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    I really enjoyed the overall flow of this, it read without seams, not an easy thing to do in free-verse.

    tho I have to say I find most end-line punctuation painful....lol

    a brilliant write.

    three clappy thingys...


    • Dalaney gold member
      October 28
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      eh, I know what you mean by end-line punctuation, but like a lousy pot hole, sometimes you just can't avoid it Thank you very much for coming by to read and for the applause
      L


  • Swangrnv gold member
    October 28

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    I'M NOT GOING TO SAY ANYTHING

    about this write..I LIED! L.O.L. IT'S EFFING BRILLIANT MY FRIEND! bravo...


    • Dalaney gold member
      October 28
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      lol...you, not saying anything??? Nevah! lol Thank you, Richard...I love hearing from you

  • Topnotchsy
    October 28

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    Great imagery as always, and a full story captured in this piece.


  • Xianaria
    October 28

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    Very nicely done, Laney ~
    As I read this, I watched the scene unfold...
    Intense images and emotions throughout ~ like a piece taken from a great, undiscovered novel...I enjoyed the read.

    ~ Tim


    • Dalaney gold member
      October 28
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      hi Tim...thank you for such a really nice comment. Like the rose, too


  • HaleyMary
    October 28

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    Beautiful write, Lane. I liked the last stanza the best. I think love can make people foolish sometimes in life. Sometimes I find it's good to be careful around people, 'cause you might like them way more than they like you and sometimes I think that can cause trouble. Anyway, thanks for sharing your talent and keep that pen flowing.


  • Lactar Wolfgang
    October 28
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    good job


  • Thomas Scott gold member
    October 28

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    Good yarn superbly told.

    Fascinating to watch your tracks disappearing into new and different places.
    Always enjoy reading you, Lane.

    Tom


  • John Faulkner
    October 28

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    Some people fear stormy nights, others are inspired by them..Obviously, you are in the latter group.You are a great story teller, as well as a poet.You wove this gem in a fabulous way.I can feel your emotions throughout this poem..The imagery is super..Congrats


    John


    • Dalaney gold member
      October 28
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      John, thank you very much. I would rather be a storyteller than anything else in the world


  • george the 23rd
    October 28

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    I like it when you play around and have fun! Glad your stormy nights are back! I seem to remember them bringing you loads of inspiration this time last year...
    What a fun write to read! I will have to come back and visit this one again.
    Eloquent, funny, and filled to bursting with very human foibles...
    Also, don't we all know a "William the Wanker" in our lives? Can't stand 'em! Those pretty boys with the silver spoon lolling perpetually out of self-satisfied mouths!


    • Dalaney gold member
      October 28
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      thank you, G I think there are a few more stormy nights in the forecast ahead


  • Ellegirl silver member
    October 28

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    Wonderful...I hope this guy stays at your house and doesn't come to mine
    once Rachael starts dating.
    Hoping you have plenty more stormy nights with writing like this!

  • Rowan gold member
    October 28

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    What a great tale you've woven here...hon. And yeah, I could read more of this love/unloved story.

    • Dalaney gold member
      October 28
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      lol...it was fun to do...just something different for me, and yes, i think i might do another...i always root for the underdog

  • Just a poet gold member
    October 28

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    tantalising story telling, great characterisations and imagery to die for.

    Superb material, love it

    J


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    October 28

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    Intriguing…more please.


  • Garmond gold member
    October 28

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    See when you say 'don't' as in "don't ask me where this came from"... I feel a sudden overwhelming urge to ask you where it came from

    William sounds like a cool guy to me....I love sidewalk art! Barristers??? Hmmm not so much

    Your imagination is utterly amazing Lane... you are truly a special talent and always utterly original. This snippet of a story leaves me with a thousand questions and I just want to read more.

    Please write another installment for us.


    • Dalaney gold member
      October 28
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      you rebel thank you very much and of course, i will answer all thousand questions...


  • Sesheta
    October 28

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    What an intriguing tale! Told with such fabulous poetry. I am very curious to see the resolution, or at least continuation You have a gift, ma'am, and I am blessed to witness it


  • cricketjeff gold member
    October 28

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    Simply stunning!

    A delicious piece of storytelling, in so few words you draw such clear and telling pictures of the participants. I love it and I am very deeply humbled, indeed stunned, thank-you



    Jeff


  • Amera gold member
    October 28

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    I love your playing around! This is sooooo cool! When I read your poetry I make the sign of the holy cross but I hope I don't smell like petunias.

    Love from your much younger Sister,
    Amera

    • Dalaney gold member
      October 28
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      ha ha ha...much younger sister...yes, darling, you can still make me laugh like no other
      you will never smell like petunias...magnolias for you


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    October 28

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    Out-of-the-box stuff for you, k-c.


  • arafura gold member
    October 28

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    First rate! You sure do got yourself a way with words there ma'am!


  • LivingxXxProof
    October 28

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    wow, you never cease to amaze me with your writing.


    • Dalaney gold member
      October 28
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      and you, darling, are going to spoil me with such lovely comments Thank you


  • Night Hope gold member
    October 28

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    I suppose it's when she becomes golden that makes it ache most of all. This is witty and sad and lovely and all too true to life, Lane.



  • csmmoms2
    October 28
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    Love is sure a funny thing. -c


  • jazzcat gold member
    October 27

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    What a great feel to this piece -- so Victorian and yet, more fun. The whole piece is great -- I love the setup and how everything evolves and how the narrator acts -- it's really a wonderful piece of writing and probably quite fun for you to create. That last stanza is perfect. Great writing!!!


    • Dalaney gold member
      October 28
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      yes, it was fun your words here are much appreciated and i am so happy you liked it


  • MissingBatteries
    October 27

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    Oh my, oh my. This was fantastic, as your writing always is. But "bump on a rhino’s arse" made me laugh like I have needed to all day. It is strange how your "playing around" still brings light to the poet I would like to be. I adore your poetry.

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