i.
i pick up the round open mouths
of empty plates and wash them out
with soap. as if the chocolate cake crumbs
around their ceramic lips
was a sin in need of penance.
you sit there on the couch,
as if it were a pew,
praising football players
and listening to the weeping
of running water from the kitchen.
ii.
we picked strawberries
on trails that led to rock beaches
and silent stretching skies.
our hands empty, except
for the stain of scarlet,
seeping into our palms.
after splitting the seeds
with our teeth,
we sowed into each other’s orifices.
gardeners, constantly
harvesting.
iii.
i decided we needed a plastic mattress
protector. not for wetting,
but for guilt free whipped cream.
we slid and stuck
to the plastic, heat and cream
covering your cupping hands.
i rinsed the protector
like a dirty condom,
except at night
with the lawn sprinkler.
iv.
we once were chocolate,
ice, and cherries.
addicted to spooning
into each other
and savoring every spoon
full. but now,
we are empty plates.
with only scarlet stained palms
and a plastic mattress
protector, to prove
our beginning.
Author notes
probably not what you were looking for.
and for goodness sake, critique. thanks 
peace to all ~flight
A contest entry
- time for dessert by girl interrupted by Girl-Interrupted.
707 points, ended November 10, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
honesty
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exceptionally original..
very vivid imagery, congrats on the gold..
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i must admit... this was entirely different than the other entries that i have recieved so far. but it's also my favorite thus far too.
ii-- the ending was brilliant, in fact the majority of the poem is.
i can in fact, give you wht i sincerly enjoyed and wish you the best in the contest and thank you for entering...!
love,
becca ♥
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thank you!!
peace to all ~flight
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FLIGHT!!!!!
this is my favorite poem you've ever written, maybe.
comparing open mouths to plates was a beautiful image, andhow you brought that back ot the end? BRILLIANT.
2nd section was gorgeous, full of s's and alliteration galore. i ate it up.
bookmarked. seriously. wow.
[sorry, i couldn't give any real critique ]
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that's okay i'm pleased with your thoughts anyway
i'm glad you liked this!!!
peace to all ~flight
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