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What I Want

I hate these feelings I get when I eat.
I want to be empty; insides clean and neat.
I want to be thin; just skin and bone,
But I want to be happy, not feel so alone.
I want to wake up, have this nightmare be done.
Just once I want to feel like I have won.
I don’t want to keep losing these battles I fight.
I want to get better and do what is right.
But I’m afraid of the food and getting too fat.
And I can’t help but think, “What life is that?”

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  • LesbianOfLove
    November 8

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    Definitely not dumb
    too many women can relate to the emotions shown here. I like the way you utilize rhyme in this poem, it flow really well.
    Great work!


  • PaigeePerfectionx
    October 29

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    This isnt dumb! This is truley amazing, you captured it so well. And also it rhyms and flows well, and not in a icky sticky cliché type of way. Its really well writen, and discribes my feelings pretty well. Its brilliant! But i'm also sorry you feel like that, i wish there was something I could do for you... if you ever need to talk, im here! x


  • starving4perfection
    October 28

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    omg its not dumb at all!! its amazing and you expressed your feelings well.
    i think that to myself all the time....it isnt much of a life is it? but you WILL get to the other side it'll just take time thats all...your a strong willed person and i know that you will get better i believe in you and ill help you in any way i can...i promise
    you dont deserve to be suffering like you are .... and i just wish you could see your already beautiful as you are
    this was a very heartfelt poem and i loved every bit of it! i hope your okay ... x x x x


  • AngelicDreams
    October 28

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    Not really. Everyone has a fear that is justified. Eating disorders are not only a fear, they are a problem that most parents and friends ignore.
    It is too bad that societies ignore the essence of a person and focus on looks.
    Be strong and you WILL overcome this. Just that you are beautiful in every single way.


  • findingurself.less
    October 27

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    Of course it's not dumb!!! I am so very glad to FINALLY see something new from you! I am sorry for this nightmare you are going through. I am sorry that I don't understand at all. Or maybe I do, as I also see food as the enemy, only in a different way. I know you overcome this! I know you are a strong person. It comes through in your writing. "Just once I want to feel like I have won" I love that part! So true, for most people I think. Find that strength girly, I know its in there... It screams through in your writing.

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