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forever is over.

part of me wishes i could stop
and just rip my emotions from my skin.
i can't take keeping things hidden underneath the surface

 

imfuckingbreaking

 

and no one is helping.

 

 

 

 


i remember when i use to breathe and not have to worry if i was sucking up someone else's air. or the days when the words the echoed from my naive lips were just words and nothing more. and i remember when love was nothing more than someone holding my hand and telling me forever and ever


forever has been fucked by dishonesty and raped by reality.

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i've been told i'm overly dramatic and that i should stop making the impossible real. well excuse me for trying to say things to you that have everything to do with the fact that you have taken over my mind, i'm sorry that i decided that i loved, and forgive my ignorance because i believed. it.


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the more i lose myself the bigger this hole in my collarbone gets, i don't know if its you pulling away from me or society sinking in. all i know is something needs to click within me and fill this space because i'm losing touch and i'm slipping out of life.

 

and eventually i'll be nothing but your distant memory,

 

 

 

your should have been

 

 

 

 

 

 

your could have been.

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i was kind of... well not kind of.. i was extremely heated so excuse all the f-bombs and stuff

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  • This Is My Story
    November 14
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    Wow well done. Very intense.


  • babygirl2582 silver member
    November 8
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    DAMN!!!!!

    ... For a lack of a better word to express how the raw emotion in this piece made me feel...

    "i remember when i use to breathe and not have to worry if i was sucking up someone else's air. or the days when the words the echoed from my naive lips were just words and nothing more. and i remember when love was nothing more than someone holding my hand and telling me forever and ever


    forever has been fucked by dishonesty and raped by reality."

    RAW.... POWERFUL.... DAMN...

    LOL!.... Amazingly done.





  • Tzipora
    November 5
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    deep. well done.


  • Fallen-Phases
    October 29

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    I love the use of metaphors and the play on words in your poetry!!! it's great!!!!!!! though it kind of makes me want to rip apart my own poems, because they lack the flow and communication you have, with all your poetry. Excellent job


  • novacaine.
    October 27

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    this is so sad. i love it.

    especially "forever has been fucked by dishonesty and raped by reality." && "and eventually i'll be nothing but your distant memory,"

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