I loose myself within my mind,
Through this fog love for you becomes hard to find.
Im not sure about having a child,
All these feelings are to wild.
I want to be six feet under,
Nothing left for me to ponder.
I've lost everything i needed,
Your words have once again succeded.
Tareing me down, clawing at my soul,
Until im nothing but flesh, Demons we have created still wont let go.
Your done, Im falling,
The devil, hes calling.
A contest entry
- Dark Poetry~ 50 Entrants, two poems each!~ by xPsychoticxRealityx.
500 points, ended November 15, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - It's time for a bit of a contest i think. ;) by Jaffa-.
900 points, ended December 1, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, • Add to finalists list, or remove from contest
Alexandrea Brooks
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Again, loved it.
Brilliant write, you have a way with rounding up your poetry that's really amazing.
Really beautiful write with deep and meaningful emotion.
Thanks for the entry.
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I really want to be able to judge this......it's amazing but i need what option it's in. You have until the end of the contest or you'll be DQ'd
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I definitely love the last four lines; beautiful in a dark, horrible way. This poem feels very deep and heartfelt, simply dripping with pain. I do suggest cleaning up the spelling and rhythm a bit - do that and this will be a truly brilliant piece of art.
Great Write.
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Wonderful, wonderful write. Nicely penned, writer
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Wow i really loved this poem.
Reading it i get a feelingit to be a real mature write,
the flow was great and rhyming was not forced at all.
Your done, Im falling,
The devil, hes calling
I LOVED the endining two lines for me it really tells what the poem is all about and how serious matter it is ..
great write..
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This was intense and sorrowful...i'm sorry you feel this way, you can message me any time if you need to talk. ={
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