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beloved

the fervid urge between two souls
catapults an archaic pitch
taste, touch, sense and smell
synchronizes a perfect symbiotic beating
humming beneath the flesh
electric breath caresses
hands, lips, bodies unite and kiss
gliding silently, begging release
the harmonious symphony crescendos
tempo summit peaks simultaneously
and in unison seize zenith euphoria

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  • ckwriter69
    November 10
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    Nice work on this poem. I like all the alliteration that you have used in this one, especially the use of all the "S" sounds, sense, smell, synchronizes, symbiotic, carresses, silently, symphony, summit, simultaneously, seize. Nicely erotic, thanks for sharing and keep writing.


  • Rainbow7
    October 27
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    electric breath caresses....

    well-worded erotica...
    excellent writ


  • oceanbluize
    October 27
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    Simply delicate, and beautiful.