Falling stars sound,
midnight romeos
and sweet dreams
contaminated.
Broken promises,
and chaos,
with felicity.
I wanted
some new air.
Author notes
10 poets
20 words
30 minutes (I barely made it XD)
prompt: A breath of fresh air
In a list
A contest entry
- Quickie [10/20/30] by August Starlight.
575 points, ended October 27, 8 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Send me into an asylum with Harsh Critique!
Comments
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"Broken promises,
and chaos,
with felicity." ......... reminds me of the Winston Churchill quote, about how optimists see the opportunity in every difficulty. Then, what could be more fortunate and joyous than opportunity ... the wellspring for self-growth, shaping and wisdom?"I wanted
some new air."
... a change of scene, an emergence from a rut, a new hue for the sky, a new look, or a simple yet profound sign to show time has moved on and that the tiredness of being in one place in oneself (or in one's surroundings et al) for too long is fading, that something new by way of possibility is unfurling, can really be all a heart could wish for at times. A simple, achievable wish that we need often await no coming of magic or miracle to come true.I liked this Josh, and have placed it in my new List of poems by others which I like and recommend to those who visit my space on AP. Hope it'll bring you some more readers over time
Stu
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i love poems like these:
short
full of detail
a thought and sensation as you read it
this was a great poem amazing lawls yeah nice trophy :3
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Aww Joshy! This is pretty! And very good for only 20 words.
I miss you! 
Monkeysex
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this is really good and it's okay that you barely made it because this is absolutely genius.
I really like your take on the prompt.
thanks for entering and best of luck in the contest.
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