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I dont wanna be me

Everyday that goes by I tell yet another lie
unable to tell people how I really feel inside.
Like how I feel everyday I wish I wasnt even here
wishing I could fizzle out and simply dissapear.
Or even just be someone I would like to be
a good daughter and sister to my family.
I dont like any bit of who I have become
Im messed up, and everything I do goes wrong.
I wish I was just someone else I would like to be
cause I realised today, I dont wanna be me.

A contest entry

I dont know why I wrote this Its how I feel right now....:'( hope its okay for the contest x its really shit im sorry everyone.. x

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  • lesbian-in-love
    November 6

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    This was very good. It was very well written. Thanks so much for entering and best of luck to you in the contest. Your going on to round 3.


  • deep blue sea
    November 3

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    lovely.awsum


  • XxJustBellaxX
    October 29
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    I actually liked it good job


  • Poetryintheblood gold member
    October 29

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    It's not shit at all, it's how you were feeling and they make the best writes, so thank you for entering and good luck, and by the way I think its awesome, Josie


  • NvrTh1nEn0ugh
    October 28

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    I love it. It flowed so beautifully. I hate to see you going through the same things as me right now. I'm here for you.


  • Darkmoon
    October 28

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    It's pretty good. I'm sorry you feel that way, i felt that at one time. Don't worry if you hang on, that feeling will go away. If you need me, i'm here.

    ~Edna~


  • evershine-90
    October 28

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    Wow! i can relate to this piece well. i loved the way you brought out your emotions in this piece with the rhyme, its flowed perfectly. well done!


  • Starme
    October 28

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    Aww sorry your feeling like this but you should love yourself for who u are!!!
    I like the poem cause u put all your emotions into it.


  • five5volley
    October 27

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    AMAZING!!

    I absoluely love everything you say in this poem. I'm struggling as well and these are the exact thoughts that go through my head everyday. You couldn't put it in more beautiful heartfelt words than this
    great job

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