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A stream flows from the Loon Lake of my mind

A stream flows from the Loon Lake of my mind

             

               (For Pat)




it requires no particular place to flow,

no respect from the land it feeds,
no song of itself for ungrateful ears.

It cannot be damned by merchant or scoundrel,

by grasping claws of those who cannot
inherit the magic of the moon, the clarity,

the wisdom of water tumbling over the smooth

stone of time.

The paintings I sing, the vistas of poetry I paint,

the story that tells me, line the banks like

wildflowers that usurp a neglected park.
All seasons reside along this rhythmic ribbon

of thought, this stream of consciousness.

If you listen, you can hear your spirit sing

like my loon, my coyote, my laughter and tears.

There is a bend on this chromium path,

where sunrise kisses each mourning

with a hopeful mouth, hungry for you,

where a forever stone creates an eddy

that defines peace with silent song.

Can you hear the ripples, from the stone

I have tossed for you?  This is the place

light goes to play with water and time is not.

This morning, I built you a bench there.

It is not an ordinary bench.
It will take you to your own stream, lift you

from unwanted time, place, and company.

 

This bench can fly.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 








 

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This is really a per-write from a couple years back.

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  • Rowan gold member
    October 28
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    I'm so glad you re-posted this.
    Do you ever write crap??? lol. Beautiful rob. Ecrivain's comment made me weep...
    what a tribute.


    • just rob gold member
      October 29
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      I have 2400 pages of crap collecting dust in the back room.

  • ecrivain01
    October 27

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    Thanks. ;)

    She cried when I first read it to her, and I will never forget it. Her son had done her dirt and she was feeling so down and alone then. I really think she would have died even sooner if it hadn't been for this.


  • marc creamore
    October 27

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    Rob . . . as you know I have the first version of this poem in one of your books, thus I went back and read it. As much as I loved the initial one, this one speaks in more tender phrasing, almost like a whisper or the wind blowing through the Autumn trees. Haunting and ethereal . . .

    Marc


  • Night Hope gold member
    October 27

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    As one usurping wildflower to another, I concur, my Friend.
    I remember this piece quite well, Rob. It is a beautiful memory and a wonderful tribute to your friend. Who wouldn't weep at this tender song? Thank you for pulling this one back into the fold, Scribe, and for placing it in my contest. Good luck.



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