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lemon chiffon

 

 

                          she lay between the lines

                          of romance novels,

 

 

dipped her finger into sherbet
(the same colour as the sun)
and tasted heartbreak,
affairs and bitterness.


the same kind she wanted
to spit out in his face


but the colour was too
                     beautiful.
and he was a pig.
and her eyes were
                           heavy.


so aching fingers
tugged reality beneath her chin
and watched dawn exhale
through sheer drapes.

Author notes

I think the book she was reading is called 'lemon chiffon' and it sounds like a good one

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  • perfectsunset gold member
    November 15
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    Ooh wow; I love this piece.
    It reminds me of the way
    I've felt many times before
    towards certain significant
    others.

    Gorgeously crafted hun-
    your imagery melts the soul.

    Best of luck & thanks for entering


  • The Drifter
    October 28

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    A hazey, low light type poem as one lingers between awake and sleep, heavey eyes, where reality and fantasy intertwine into their own type of reality. What is true and what is fantasy can't be told as one drifts off to sleep to dream.
    This is what I got out of your well written poem with its smooth flow. A good write. Thank you for sharing.


  • whitecoffee
    October 28

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    ahhhh!! Love it! sherbet stanza my fave. much luck to you, this was delightful

  • Topnotchsy
    October 27
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    Beautiful imagery here!


  • emma...
    October 27
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    she lay --> she lays? she laid?
    i especially love the second to last stanza. wow.
    this is beautiful, as always


    • silverscent gold member
      October 27

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      she lay....past tense of lie


      • emma...
        October 27

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        haha..ok. i guess it sounds awkward to me for some reason >.< but i fail at grammar

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