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October 27, 2009 - Power in Love

Power in Love 

When we are tossed and turned

When we are thread bare and scorned

When we are weary to the bone

When we are hungered beyond hollow

We know a simple, small act

gives us great strength

We know inside is not dirty-spoiled

as we warm in bone-chilled huddles

Far richer than wealthy, are we

by weathering life’s storms

with little more than ourselves

wrapped around a little kernel of love

Like learning, it cannot be stolen

Like respect, it is earned

Like devotion, no scorekeeping

Like salvation, it is by grace

Author notes

Prompt: The Power of Love

A contest entry

How is something so simple, so enduring, so misunderstood?

    I plan to revise this poem: please leave constructive criticism!
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Comments

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  • TOEchikira
    October 30
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    oh wow this is beautiful! i love it <3

    • Bjarne gold member
      October 30
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      Many Thanks

      I am honored that "Power in Love" spoke so well to you. Hope you are doing well!
      Regards
      bjarne

  • louvre4
    October 28

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    Such a sincere rendering of the real power of love. So impressed with the overall message and the beauty of the presentation. Well done!

    louvre

  • churchill
    October 28

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    powerful message

    I can see why this was awarded a silver. You have such enormous sensitivity to relationships between caring individuals. You clearly understand human emotions and reactions so very well. the language is superb and your technical skills have served you well. Just a really terrific poem. Thoroughly appreciated the sentiments.

    churchill


  • SummerlandRayne gold member
    October 28

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    This is such a wonderful write...it speaks so beautifully of the true soul and heart of love. Your words never cease to bless my heart. Thank you for sharing this and for being so kind.



    Az

    • Bjarne gold member
      October 28
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      Thanks

      You deserve kindness and it is so easy to do!
      b

  • iroquois silver member
    October 28

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    meaningful message

    As I read this really well crafted poem I see that you are a man who knows a thing or two about real love. I am always impressed at the mature assessment you offer about life and all the emotions that make us human. Very special write that I will be bookmarking.

    hope your day is filled with the love you describe,

    iroquois

  • Coldwater
    October 28

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    I'm running out of words to describe your colourful brand of poetry.
    Sentiment and wisdom in abundance. (Just a couple more!) Well done.
    Regards.


  • solitaire
    October 27

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    expressive

    A very lovely poem written so well by one who must truly understand the value and nature of true love. Language is rich and your message strong.

    solitaire


  • ivoire gold member
    October 27

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    Congratulations!

    The poem is beautiful beyond any words I could choose. It is a sentiment so touching so close to the heart and your composition is excellent in all ways -certainly deserving a silver or more.

    ivoire


  • AngelBellerose gold member
    October 27
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    all I can say is this is beautiful for each words painted me a picture of the message brought.. thank you so much for penning for me... beautiful as Hugs Angel♥

    • Bjarne gold member
      October 27
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      Thank You

      I appreciate your comments and also awarding my piece a Silver!

      bjarne

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