'Plain Jane', that's what they called her
who knew what was beneath the skin?
who knew of her desire to be loved
beneath that serious exterior?
As she sat quiet and sedate before
her master, their hearts spoke to one another
but their faces revealed nothing.
As he charmed her heart, she knew
only, how to behave as a lady would,
her innocence concealing from her the truth
that her lover held so close to himself.
The madness that shared her shelter, she
knew nothing of, it made her sweeter.
Her heart he tore as he tried to
draw her into his web of deceit so
she did the honest thing and fled.
The doorstep of her cousins cottage she
fell across, her life in their hands.
And back to health did this family restore her.
Her fortunes changed; employment and wealth
her way came. And an offer of marriage which
she could not take, as her name she heard
called across many miles and so
to him whom she loved and adored
she knew she should and would return.
To his blinded sight and burned arms did she
run. In his forest abode where he dwelt in shame and guilt.
And out of love and pity, by his side
she stayed and agreed to an honest marriage.
So no longer did she sit before her master,
but instead, in the heart of her adoring lover.
A contest entry
- Prewrites!!!! by Fallen-Thumper.
1200 points, ended November 13, 177 entries
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Comments
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Very lovely write.
Makes me wish I read the book. It's always seemed elegant and classy. Very nice poem with a good flow. I like poems about novels.
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beauty
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I enjoyed this poem it was a good read, thank you for sharing
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Interesting write, even though in some sentences the word order is a bit twisted unnecessarily.
I love all of the Bronte sisters stories, so it's exciting to see someone addressing one through poetry. I've often wondered if I might do the same. I think you pretty much summed up the entire book, and I see you drummed up some interest in your readers. For that, I salute you...a most unusual book report I'd say, but I loved it.
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Lovely write. I don't know the story of Jane Eyre but am intrigued by your presentation. I may go read her story now. Great job!
Sharon
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i love Jane.. and this write!
beautiful penning!
love & blessing
Rend
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This poem was very exceptional. It is something i can relate to, having run back to an abuser more than once.
It took so many twists in my mind, and brought to life alot of memories for me. and even though those memories werent the best, they taught me alot. And this poem helped remind me of those lessons learned.
A bit of constructive criticism. The poem as a whole was great, but your lines and stanzas were a bit rough and choppy. The overall message was stunning, but it was hurried and seemed kind of like it was thrown together, even if thats not the case. and that could take away the appeal for some readers. I like the rough style, and think it was great. try touching up your lines and spacing, but preserve the wording as best you can.
Great job poet.
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thank you for entering
thanks for entering and good luck, i really loved the last stanza, amazing and a really great write, brilliant!
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Loved it. The final stanza was especially good. Keep up the fantastic work.
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The opening two lines are stunning. The last two lines in the verse are good as well. These are poetry. The story is lovely.
Love,
Tom B.
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