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Challenged

"Hey! you idiot, what are you doing here?- get lost" a man shouted at Ryan, a teenaged boy, "he he he... Uncle is angry, uncle is angry" he said in nasal voice while clapping and dancing on the street.
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In a garden bloom
all buds of yesterday-
one flower less
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"What is two plus two?" questioned a fourth grade student to Ryan, "two plus two its tu-tu, yeah twi-tu, tu-tu twi-tu, he he he.... So nice, so nice", Ryan laughed and clapped while replying, "ha ha ha.... Say again twi-tu tu-tu, Bill come here, listen what he says", fourth grader asked his friend to join the fun-show!
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With new morning
new buds bloom-
a dry old bud
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"Gosh! Its raining heavy and we're late, quick quick its already late", talked two friends on wet stairs while quickly getting down, "Aaa..." screamed one when another shouted, "help help", blood flushed down stairs with no one there except Ryan playing in rain.
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Roaming bees
come to garden-
unhappy flowers
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"Blood so much, don't worry Mamma says doctor cures blood", said Ryan and started running in severe rain, got one van when all scared maintained distance, Ryan helped lady to go hospital, "such a finesse of act from a mentally challenged guy unbelievable", applauded all while he remained indifferent with his usual, "he he he..."
~~~
bees one by one
suck all flowers...
one bud fresh

Author notes

Haibun- a prose poem on the given prompt: finesse

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  • Ken-Maverick
    November 19
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    JUDGED

    Nicely done.

    All the best in the contest.

    Ken