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Rain on Me

It's monday night
And I sit by the window
Watching the rain
And the lightening show

The glass is cold
the stars won't shine
I really wish
he was mine

Classical plays
Flowing softly
Wishing you had
finally caught me

It was the past
That I couldn't let go of
What more do I need
When there is your love

Like the fading sun
There's variations of emotion
Some floating happily
Others causing commotion

And a tear lightly
caresses my cheek
I lay on my bed
Tears soaking my sheet

I wish I stole
Your true heart
And handing you mine
So early wasn't smart

I went crazy
And bled over you
Red mixed with tears
sadness and anger too

Another relationship
gone down the drain
All of this caused
A little more pain

It strengthened my black ribbon
As it wrapped 'round my heart
It must have weakened yours
Whilst mine tore me apart

And as I sit
Alone in my room
I wondered how you felt
And what you're doing too.

Author notes

Dedicated to any guy who will ever hurt me.

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  • dragongirl
    November 22
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    Very nice, very sad. You are one of the masters at creating poems. Anyway, this is an awesome poem.

  • goalsv
    October 28

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    Even tho this shows your saddness and depression of the situation it also shows your strength, Knowing that you could be hurt yet keeping strong. Nice poetic flow.


  • Spike McCloud
    October 27

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    I'm really sorry, I wish you wouldn't feel like this. D do anything right now to be with you and show you love. I'm sorry it didn't work out. I'm sitting here crying while taking a World History test. Everyone's staring at me, becuase they don't know how much pain I caused you. I wish this pain will go away, and I wish that I was over at your house to hold you tightly for however lone it takes. I I cry becuase I broke your heart, and don't tell me that I didn't. I wish everything would go back to the way it was before. It's not because you aren't tottaly Awesome, and great to listen to, becUse you are. There's nothing wrong with you, it's all on me right now don't feel bad please. I wish a person could have two hearts right now, one for each of my two favorite girls. I'll love you always,
    Bret


    • Celtic Legend
      October 27
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      Unless you do something totally drastic, This is NOT for you Bret! I promise!


  • Blood N Tears
    October 27
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    I know how you feel sweetie. Great expression!

    Lillie

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