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Attack of the Blog-o-Sphere written in Metaphor, badly






Like vinegar to a side split wound
let the pain ooze,
Henry Darger in a dress.

Stop the tits from all that screaming
"we're art, we're art"
hit the swollen photographer with his Minolta
but don't upset the apple cart
full of sour sensibilities hidden in sweet overalls
right strap hanging over a plucky nipple --
just so

oh 

"Little Henry's heart is not in the right place"

it's been gouged from the cavity
left exposed and pumping weakly
call Freud for an examination
has she stopped all that masturbation?

quickly!  bury that thing!

It can only be real.





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  • Lilac Moon silver member
    November 1

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    I loved this:

    "Stop the tits from all that screaming
    "we're art, we're art"
    hit the swollen photographer with his Minolta
    but don't upset the apple cart
    full of sour sensibilities hidden in sweet overalls
    right strap hanging over a plucky nipple --
    just so

    oh"

    Lilac Moon


  • porksnorkel
    October 28
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    tits = canvas
    cock = paintbrush


  • NurseChilly gold member
    October 28

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    young pups or old dogs, they all do the same things... we do the same things, we err to be human after all.. im sure 'henry' liked this ... all that is playful is a puppy after all

    it can be real

  • IronIcecream
    October 27

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    people don't like it when a cigar is only a smoke
    but unlike them
    freud has read the tibetan book of the dead

    wonder why photographers with oversized guns are hit so hard
    they bear the burden of a tabloid economy

    between misuderstanding and misinterpretations
    the blog-o-sphere gives people the chance to observe people and how they really are
    in all the lack of understanding that oozes from steel tracked pink ribbons and trigger free jane-I-joes

    because otherwise everybody has to say something
    bad or badly written

    p.s.
    what does heart have to do with the right?
    heart is on the left
    all hearts are


  • just mercedes gold member
    October 27

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    Wow. Here's Henry again!

    I've been trying to design my own little world, to write a few poems that are non-referential , like John Ashbery did with Girls on the Run. "our fashions are in fashion / only briefly, then they go out / and stay that way for a long time"

    I love this!

    • cvillelisa
      October 27

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      I've always been obsessed with him I think. Yes yes -- Girls on the Run.
      I spit this one out after an exchange at on the web this morning -- sometimes ya know you just gotta go with what comes.

      I think there's more to come.

      Thanks.


  • Night Hope gold member
    October 27

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    Good old Sigmoid Fraud. Sometimes a cigar IS just a smoke. Good one, Lisa. Even if you tried, you couldn't do metaphor badly. Your talent wouldn't cooperate.



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