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What took you so long?

You asked
Six years ago
Before you left , for good
Almost two years ago



We talked of sunsets
We smiled at ‘one day’…
We laughed at inanities
We were…



You took my heart
And I yours
You never came back
I never left

Author notes

prelude to a story that i still cannot begin to write cuz the truth hurts

A contest entry

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  • Virgoan
    November 9

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    I will agree with Heather, lovely thought. Line 7 needs a bit of clarification - 'inanities'. The ambitious effect in the beginning is good but not effective - a bit unsound.

    Thanks for sharing.


  • Naridill
    October 28
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    I like the end. Stunning thought.