In a perfect world
I would have not fallen so quickly
I would never have given you myself fully
not if I had known how imperfect your world was
you were my light
my everlasting
I could look at you for hours
be held in your arms and not move an inch
My love for you
in this perfect world
would have been doll like
but now I realize I'd never have broken free
so in a perfect world
filled with false promises you promised me
all once upon a time
in that not so perfect world
I loved you...
Author notes
I was intrigued 2 write something 4 ur contest once I saw your prompt. I hope u like it ^_^ Take care
A contest entry
- Prompt For You #3 by Jeremy0826.
1900 points, ended November 9, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, • Add to finalists list, or remove from contest
plz leave any tips u have 2 help me make this better!!
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This is such a beautifully sad piece. I love your thoughts
and imagery throughout this. Thank you so much for your
entry here and good luck to you with it!
Jeremy0826 -
i like it that is all i know, there was a lot of emotion in this poem, keep it flowing
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Thanx ^_^
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A very touching and eloquent write !
It is a unique and wonderful take on
the prompt , love it Lorissa !
Best wishes , Friend Easy
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Thank u ^^
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