Ditch the ads, upload images and much more - upgrade today from 5.95/month!
Read • Contests • Groups • Learn • Forums • Store • Help
 

Beginning of the End

At the beginning of the end
a new day is dawned,
as my head stops spinning
I realize where I have gone.

I step to the curb
and reach out my hand,
I am quite disturbed
by this wretched land.

With rifles we fight,
abolish globalization,
from dusk in to night
questioning God's good creation.

Desolate and fading,
a world deteriorating,
a society downgrading,
decreasing our rating.

We cannot see
behind the closed doors,
enforced bourgeoisie
defined by your cores.

Author notes

PROMPT:
6) The Catcher in the Rye, by J D Sallinger
"you felt like you were disappearing every time you crossed a road."

A contest entry

What do you think?

    I plan to revise this poem: please leave constructive criticism!
    : , Your review:

    Comment Suggestion: What is your your first impression?
    • Line numbers  • Invite them to read
    : no Cost: 0 free left 0 points, You have (?)

Comments

1 - 8 of 8

  • Melee Vau gold member
    November 11

    Edit | Reply
    this feels like dejavu as I commented on this poem last night, but seems gremlins have been eating my words.
    I like your world view, expressed in such dark and forceful verse. Love the final verse: "We cannot see
    behind the closed doors,
    enforced bourgeoisie
    defined by your cores."
    enjoyed the journey, let's knock on those doors (tear down the wall!)


    • codsta
      November 11
      Edit | Reply
      Those gremlins have eaten my words as well!! But thanks for coming back and re-commenting. I really appreciate it. I'm glad you like my world view. Thanks for the contest!


  • MichaelLeeSmyth
    November 2

    Edit | Reply
    At the beginning of which end? This road looks very familiar, I'm certain that I've seen this sign before. So down the road of historical repeats we travail along.
    Whilst I do not agree with all of what you have to say here, at least I think I don't. There is a bit a vagueness concerning globalization, as well as God's good creation.
    That most of our society is more concerned with outward appearance and how much more debt they can rack up than anything real is a truism.
    Good view on the subject.
    Peace


  • sinfull
    October 28

    Edit | Reply
    I am encouraged by your verse, as sometimes I fear that society in general is simply accepting what is spoon fed to us by government. Good to know I'm not the only one that chokes on the taste . A good pen, this. best luck in your contest


  • tomisb
    October 28

    Edit | Reply
    The artist is always outside beating on the doors. Not always sure he wants in but dead serious in the thought they need to get out more and find a life. Nothing delicate about this one, just more chomping on the ... I can hear you and you say it well, civilization is more about dressing up properly and always having a good reason for killing the opposition.
    Peace,
    Tom B.


    • codsta
      October 28
      Edit | Reply
      Thank you! I always appreciate your comments. You're right about civilization these days. It is difficult to know what really happens "behind those closed doors." I liked your example of the artist beating on the doors. Thats exactly what I was thinking.


  • darkyinsoul
    October 27

    Edit | Reply
    well done poet
    excellent rhyme and flow
    love this stanza...

    We cannot see
    behind the closed doors,
    enforced bourgeoisie
    defined by your cores.

    good luck to you in the contest
    thanks for the share
    Darky

    • codsta
      October 28
      Edit | Reply
      Thanks for your comment!! Much appreciated :-). Glad you liked it!!

1 - 8 of 8