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After The Rain




I turned the frown of
a rainbow...
        upside-down
and the gold I found,
was a smile-  from Heaven



Author notes

all about rainbows

A contest entry

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  • Naridill
    November 1

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    I would simply suggest a line space after smile. Apart from that - short, sweet and nice sense of imagery in such minimalism. I like the subtle play on words - sometimes people are too direct. Goodluck.


  • poetryality silver member
    October 29

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    I am actually seeing an "upside down rainbow". Made me Loved this Mal! The best to you in the contest! This has got to be GOLD, I mean...turning over a rainbow and all. Yes, and the "heavenly smile" is a gift from God! BEAUTEOUS!


    Always ♥

    Renee


  • Naughtygrlred
    October 28
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    how purdy


  • mgmc gold member
    October 27

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    Bravo! Clever, well written and a great message. Love it!

  • PeterUL
    October 27

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    this is brilliant

  • Rowan gold member
    October 27

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    ahhh... nice Mal.


  • Pisces rainbow gold member
    October 27

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    Well Mal

    when I saw cute poem

    I had to come see

    what a great choice I made

    as I am smiling a rainbow

     

    adorable and with a twist of profound

     

    God bless you my friend...

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