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Seeker Of the Night

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The first time it was an accident
Killing her was not his intent
But an euphoric elation seized him
Any sense of guilt soon grew dim
He became a hunter, creature of the dark
Compulsion made him leave his bloody mark
He kept the instrument, thin blade of steel
It's swift sharp caress was all they did feel
The blood lust grew more with each he slay
Unwitting victims would greet him by day
Sadistically morbid this was his need
Watching them die their life slowly bleed
The last one he impaled  left staked to a tree
His very own crucifixion in the old cemetery

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  • IntimidusRex silver member
    November 8

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    A birth of a serial killer, and the enjoyment of the first fuels his needs and feeds the ever burgeoning desires welling within his twisted psyche. This moves along well and the rhyming is good but this begs to have some more attached to it and give us the feel of who and what your man is really all about. Don't get me wtong Aries I like it alot, just felt a little more would make this something special.


  • Virgo silver member
    November 7

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    I really like the flow of this, the rhyme is very good. Very dark and creepy lovely take on the picture prompt Thanks for entering and good luck


  • RawrItsKrista
    November 2
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    Wow!

    This is amazing & the imagery is wondeful!
    :]


  • Jayde1
    October 29

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    wow

    this is an awesome poem but i agree with concrete angel...it builds then gets cut off to soon....you really should write more to this poem...but if not no worries coz what you have here is awesome....

    loved these lines...

    He became a hunter, creature of the dark
    Compulsion made him leave his bloody mark


    great stuff....keep it up


    Jayde


  • Concrete Angel silver member
    October 28

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    Awwwww... it cuts off just when it seemed to really be building up. You've already got a great piece, but I think you can expand it and make it totally wicked and creepy
    It just seems like it stops because you couldn't think of anything else to write. Would definately love to see a little more added on. But, like I said what you've got here already is fantastic

    "He kept the instrument, thin blade of steel
    It's swift sharp caress was all they did feel"

    The most fantastic imagery in the whole poem

  • JToddUnderhill
    October 28

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    Dark...

    ..... I like it but for these something of a black or dark background would make the piece work better. you wording was great but presentation would make the piece. Not downing your work just trying to be helpful once more


  • UnicornSparkleVomit
    October 27

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    A morphed picture of Joe Jonas. How nice. xD This is a rather short write but goood and the point gets across. Good whyming and whythym. Didn't scare me...but did form a small picture in my mind. Well Done.

  • Bob Fox
    October 27
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    My

    Ripper like words here poet. Often the face betrays the minds thoughts but you did a masterful job on this one . well penned.


  • darkyinsoul
    October 27

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    well done poet
    blood lust seeps it grows
    excellent poem
    thanks for the share
    good luck to you in the contest
    Darky

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