Street lights flickered in and out of life,
A faint yellow glow reflecting from
Wayward puddles beneath.
The midnight sky caressed by rain clouds became witness,
Her body imoblized by fragile attempts to
End its life before it came.
Death's metalic tinge
Evading her inhalment
Vitriolic demons
Indisisve pestering before the
Lord's house of pray.
Behold
Our
Rinkhals
Name:
Devil
Author notes
3) Waiting for Godot by Samuel Beckett
"they give birth astride of a grave"
I don't have much time now, i'll come back to it because I think I can improve it. This is also an acrostic in case you didn't notice.
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Comments
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like the twist you gave to the quote. the acrostic isn't at all forced like most and the language is really yummy. my fav lines:
"Death's metalic tinge
Evading her inhalment
Vitriolic demons"
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Wow. A dark take on the prompt
A very differing approach to anyhting I was thinking of for this prompt. A deep and dark write that has a chill to it. I have read this through a couple of times and it grows the more I read.
Nicely done and good luck in the competition.
dave
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well done poet
this has very good flow
love this stanza..
Death's metalic tinge
Evading her inhalment
Vitriolic demons
Indisisve pestering before the
Lord's house of pray.
good luck to you in the contest
thanks for the share
Darky
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