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Barbwire.



I never realised how easy it was for you to hurt me. Your strained philanges rang with hatred and various terms of threats. I didn't know it then, but you stole my heart with barbwired fingertips and ripped it to shreds.

No mercy.

I couldn't understand how easily I fell into your trap. My ignorance of depleted love affairs led me astray and you knew. You knew how easily it was to lay your trap. Now I lay solemn at the fact that I found a loop-hole.

Revenge.

I always had a knack for knowing how to get in someones head. I brushed your hair aside and whispered in your ear. Cyanide words poured from my mouth and into your air flow. I severed your emotions from your "macho-man" lifestyle and I caged your heart in barbwire, leaving you to bleed in your tears.

                                       

                     

                                          Now, I'm able to say.
                                                  Eat your heart out.

Author notes

Wow, it's been three weeks since I've written anything. I'm glad I was finally able to write.

8 poets
8-16 lines of prose
lines ~ 14 lines

prompt: picture above & wrap my heart in this
credit: claire (Noir mariposa...x)

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  • mstklz78
    October 27

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    Totally Loved It

    I felt sadness at first reading your poem then I was like dang!!! Speechless, I like being speechless at the end of a poem and this poem almost seemed real and I really want to know what you said "Cyanide words poured from my mouth" It was just great and made me smile. Very intelligent and wonderfully vindictive naturally. I can't wait to read more from you. You both were trapped with extreme hurt as barbwire must truly hurt. Really loved it. I can't say there is anything wrong with it! Just want to know what you whispered


  • Noir mariposa...x gold member
    October 27

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    Aww I've missed reading your work, dear

    I love this, especially with the italics emphasizing on things :]

    "Cyanide words poured from my mouth and into your air flow. I severed your emotions from your "macho-man" lifestyle and I lead you to bleed in your tears." < best line I've heard for a while





    Claire x


    • Cyanide Dreams
      October 27

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      And i"ve missed writing xD. I'm gonna try and be on more often too too. I changed up that last line a bit, but not too much xD Thank you so much.

      Now, I'm off to bed