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Who knows

Where does
Fate take you
When she whisks
You away

Does she
Lay you down
Easy

Or
Lead you
Astray

What

Moment
Is this
In a lifetime
Of dreams

Will you
Be

Blessed
Or

Just
Ripped at
The seams

Not all her
Tomorrows
Have fairytale
Endings

Along every
Path there
Are always
Some
Bendings

Pack light
For the trip
That shes
Taking you
On

For
Twilite
Is short and
Death she
Is long

Beware of the
Sharp ice
That bites
At your heel

Watch out
For the
Moments
That fate
Longs to
Steal

Gaurd
Closley
Your dreams
For when
Fate comes
To play

Who knows
Where she'll
Take you
When she
Whisks
You
Away  

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  • Tecohe
    October 27

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    Excellent!

    Metaphors are consistent and I love that the first stanza is answered in the last.
    "guard closely your dreams" is a great line. Much loved peace. Pooh to those who don't like rhyming.
    Tecohe


  • AngeTombe
    October 27

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    Beautiful!!!!

    This iece is beautiful and perfectly writen from the soul.... My favorite part was
    Watch out
    For the
    Moments
    That fate
    Longs to
    Steal

    Gaurd
    Closley
    Your dreams
    For when
    Fate comes
    To play

    Who knows
    Where she'll
    Take you
    When she
    Whisks
    You
    Away

    Just perfect!!!!! Keep up the great work....


  • The kiss is Thirst gold member
    October 27
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    i am sorry = i accidentally clicked whilst hovering over column. Already commented = sorry.


  • Howl- gold member
    October 27

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    very good read!
    love the style.
    favourite lines:

    Pack light
    For the trip
    That shes
    Taking you
    On

    For
    Twilite
    Is short and
    Death she
    Is long

    very witty

    cheers


  • Sunshine Always
    October 27

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    Wonderful write my friend and the truth in your words captures her well.Only Fate herself knows the journey she takes you on...Excellent...mal

  • The kiss is Thirst gold member
    October 27

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    Enjoyed this. I don't always like it when words are laid out in long thin column, but I did think it worked well for this piece. Well done. A fine poem.

    • Stormraven
      October 27
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      Ty

      I enjoy this style , I like the emphasis it allow to be put on words and the overall simplisity of the way it reads storm


  • Storminbrenda silver member
    October 27

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    really good rhyme love the flow and way you placed the write out on page lovely background and story/poem well done

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