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Survival

Dreams
Swim across dreamlake
Like fish gliding through life.

Fishing lines hang like little tempests
Of reality
To catch a smile.

Ambition fulfilled is often
A dream killed
To survive.



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  • Vernal Bloom
    October 27, 2009

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    Such a nice piece of poem, khahar joon! Glad to see your pen is still inking and making such nice works

  • Jerbonz
    October 27, 2009

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    You said so much in such a short piece. It takes a clever mind to put their point across in so few words and such a beautiful way.


  • muscle museum
    October 27, 2009

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    Short - but said so much. I really enjoyed reading this. You have written some beautiful phrases here.


  • Amergin
    October 27, 2009

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    I love the flow and rhythm of this piece. The brevity also works, nice work!