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Crying in the Rain

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Misty hazels resume their old roll
searching the shadows of despair
Sultry lips quiver against the cold
as crystal droplets drench the hair

City walks are becoming a blur
as tears and rain dance in tune
Spinning about the thoughts rage
the heart becomes pains cocoon

Body frail and beaten by mans hand
the words of deciet control the tears
Swallowing the lump, facing the hurt
can't resolve the uncontrollable fears

Dazed and confused, cold & soaking wet,
the city of partying, where I long to forget
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Author notes

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a double shot maybe more
how much more can one take

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  • SoulWhispher
    November 3
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    A most sad write, that moves within the heart of the reader, Love John


  • John BoSox
    November 1

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    Your thought expression and emotions render the reader helpless..You become the master..The reader becomes your tenant; relying on you for all the utilities they desire...Paid in full..The structure of your poem is seductive. You pull the reader into your web of inticement, and hold them there until you are done with them..This is a great quality of a great poet..You seem to get it..Good for you.I enjoyed this very much..congrats



    John


  • Griswold silver member
    October 27

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    I have done you wrong, I know it, I cannot deny it, nor change it now and I will regret it forever. but the Moon still rises and I wish i were under it with you... I love you... Scott


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    October 27

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    the emotions in you words and this poem just shine and fall on to the read like the rain mentions in here, keep it flowing


  • cricketjeff gold member
    October 27

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    Sad and beautiful poetry.

    Lovely ladies like you should never have to cry

    Love

    Jeff



  • Denerica silver member
    October 27
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    Wow, powerful emotion, bravely shared experiences, profound. Excellent. Blessings.


  • JohnnyD gold member
    October 26

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    Hmmmnn, so that is what you have been working on huh? nicely done for a poem, but what underlies it....well Hon, we need to talk.


    love you Tory,

    Len


  • simply logan gold member
    October 26

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    beautiful imagery, i felt as if i could feel your pain.the ending was fanastic and a nice transition as if it was a drop of rain mixed with your tears.

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