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Intoxication Romance


Take a look into these acid coloured eyes
tell me your dreams.
You and I can lay under the poisoned sky,
you can tell me all your hopeless desires.
Fill up my drug heart,
Fill me with those emotions like THC,
o' baby,
I need to take a pill to calm this romance.
You've got my veins all tangled and closed,
I can feel the acid eating my spine!
♫♪
More, more,
I want your passion,
push it, push it
I want your nasty,
I want your ugly,
I want you never touched!
Give me your love,
give me your drugged kiss!

Drop you drama,
then drop your face on the mirror.
Give me your leather kiss,
your vacant stare of lust,
give me what's in your pocket.
Give a kiss to the sugar stained mirror
and taste the winter inside you!
♫♪
More, more,
I want your passion,
push it, push it
I want your nasty,
I want your ugly,
I want you never touched!
Give me your love,
give me your drugged kiss!

This is a new design of power and passion,
the angle has cut out her tongue!
So long as your mine,
baby, your criminal life
is Russian roulette;
but if it's not scary,
babe, it's not fun!

Check you out, you psycho punk;
Choking on your vertigo and emotions,
I think you should know how now.
You're my nasty-dirty vodka boy,
one more shot and your my Jäger man!
♫♪
More, more,
I want your passion,
push it, push it
I want your nasty,
I want your ugly,
I want you never touched!
Give me your love,
give me your drugged kiss!

Don't you wanna' see these colours on me?!
O' babe!
I can be any one you want me to be!
I could be all you need,
I could be all for you.

Push it, push it,
push me, push me;
more, more, more
never, never,
no more;
I want you.

Author notes

This song has been in the works for a while now. Acid coloured eyes, drug heart, and closed veins were words kicking inside my head until I sat down and beat them up into something of song. I want to to get better, it doesn't feel done yet, what does it need? Help me out!

So it sucks less than the rest, lol, yes?

    I plan to revise this poem: please leave constructive criticism!
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Comments


  • Catz95
    October 28
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    I like this alot! BUT:

    I can feel the acid eating my spine! <<< this should be replaced with something, it seems out of place.

    Also I think it needs another stansa, it could use a better ending in my opinon. I love it though!