Its a trifle
Its a mystery to me
Why we continue down this same path
its a mystery to me
why life sometimes had no compassion
why death comes as easily as birth
its a hole in the world
no ozone could protect us from
this light cauterizes and burns so bright
No ocean breeze to cool our flesh
counterparts and number them
the days pass by and no one seems to notice me anymore
its a trifle
its a calamity
this is the end
confronted by fears wasted my tears
its a mystery its a calamity
Its love ending its life ending
its life beginning
and i'm left here wondering will you come back to me
a clamour a deafening scream
a whisper a dream, as soon as it began
its just as quickly now ending
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Changed my mind
after imagining it being droned out by someone like Leonard Cohen. Even then, I would knock out the stuff about pining for some girl, even if that was the original intention and purose of the piece. At 23, it's a fair bet that in five years' time you won't remember her name. Try reading Rupert Brooke's 'I dreamt I was in love again/With the one before the last.' It may give a bit of perspective.
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lol
im 26 now duh that was 3 years ago but this was just off the top of my head so do u think i got talent well ill try to write a decent one thnx for ur opinion
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I'd seperate the poem when the refrain happens "its a trifle.. its a calamity" Because it begins a new point in the poem, its cycling it back. Other than that, good theme, the writing isn't stunning, it's good but not unique.
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