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Heaven's Beauty, Rachel

A beautiful fair maiden
With perfect eyes so deep
Strawberry lips, upon her kiss,
Forever his to keep.

The softest snow-white skin to touch,
Like ballerina feet,
Tracing lines upon his mouth,
Right where their lips will meet.

Rachel, the heavens call her name,
Begging for her back,
She fell down from the clouds above,
Into the arms of Zack.

Rachel, the heavens envy her,
With perfections from above,
Rachel, the voice of calling birds,
Was sent for Zack to love.

A contest entry

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  • ZachP gold member
    November 9

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    awe, this is just so heavenly sweet <3
    and I absolutely love this.
    Thank you for entering,
    Zach Estel.


  • Blushfulmoon silver member
    October 29

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    excellent

    I really enjoyed this read
    Nice to meet you as well
    Best of luck in the contest
    I entered this one too
    Hope you come visit me
    Susan~~~

    • Lady Juliet
      October 29
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      Thank you very much! I look foward to reading some of your poems, which I will start to do right now. Good luck on the contest as well!

      -leah anneliese--