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He was tainted trapeze & less than a treat.

 

 

 

 

 

she was seldom sure just how to swallow his slyness, so she clung to his lips like winter's slippy surfaces and sang of fuel that failed to find his flavours: 

 

he was snowflake that refused to burn against the skin of his sins...and confessions, that skated along hate with considerable chill; whilst her soul wandered amidst streets of her steam-filled sighs...

 

she was poor, lost, covered by canopies of extended meanings and shrouded in metaphors much longer than her harms and she seemed to depend upon the ends of her state, so that her smiles would swing sideways and so she could push pens through the lenses of eager stares.

 

he rolled right up to take a profitable bite, whilst turning perfect-fits inside her first times, and she hugged his various voices until value formed a fist and she caught glimpses of his gains

 

so she tossed him a ring full of contradiction and set his stains running on tongue's cracked old track, as she dripped honest skies on his parafin facades, whilst persuading him to perform to the wit of her whip

 

and he danced for lost chances to form fabrications, as emotions etched theories underneath tarnished slits...and she stole hope's glory from memory's wage, so expressions could prance upon ceiling's release.

 

she was seldom sure just how to swallow his slyness, so she wrapped herself slumbered and managed the cold, while hands told of big-tops, of clowns and of bombs.

 

 

 

 

Author notes

prompt: nyquil and circus peanuts.

i wrote this somehow thinking that "nyquil" was some sort of medication similar to the english version of Vicks - the stuff you rub under your eyes to blag your mum that you really shouldn't be going to school. lol. The stuff you put liquid gold into to conceal it in a nightclub (through the nasal inhalers)...we have chest-rub too...but apart from the "burn factor", i havent yet learned of a bad usage for it (but there's still time )

nyquil is a cold medication that apparently knocks you out without solving the problem of your cold...so i think that assuming did me well for this write.

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  • ZachP gold member
    November 2

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    Oh, this is absolutely brilliant! This is exactly what I wanted to read!

     Even though this is pretty long, you kept my attention amazingly well. It was hard *not* to be enraptured!

     

    I love, love, love this.

    Thank you for sharing

     

    Zach Estel.

     


  • Nickelspring gold member
    October 28

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    I just love the way you write! I just read along, taking in the fantastic imagery and gleaning personal meanings here and there. Love the prompt, lol and where you have gone with it is priceless! Love the AN--
    Excellent and unique, as usual!

    Kris


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    October 27
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  • Allure of a Rose
    October 27

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    Fantastic

    This is really brilliant.
    Among many things I like about it, I Love the title very much. It's my favourite, I do believe.
    I haven't read anything this creative in a while (aside from a few). Also, I can't imagine how it can have the length and intensity that it does with such an effortless flow! Not 'til the stanza before the very last did it seem to get a little too wordy, but you still nailed the end.
    Excellent work.


  • Berlynn Blaise
    October 27

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    Wow, this is amazing! All I can think to say is thats its just so wonderful! I love it! Brilliant write!

  • sweetsilence
    October 26
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    as always a great read

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