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Twilight Song


When sunlight wanes upon the land
and shadows stray too long,
and homing birds in flight depart,
they sing a sunset song.

The bustles of the day then cease
and  folks do then go  home.
Outside  a  nightingale  keeps  watch,
the  moon above the dome.


~*~

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  • Josy2
    October 26
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    Thanks Sarah. Actually I was very reluctant to show this piece.But now I know its worth it.


  • fallendust
    October 26

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    wow this is awesome! Very impressive write. you are a good poet. this piece was short simple and ever so sweet!!! I enjoyed it's beauty!
    Sincerely,
    Sarah


  • Griswold
    October 26

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    Nicely written and a wonderful use of imagery and rhyme throughout. Nothing quite like twilight to give the heart and mind some needed serenity after the mess of the day. Thank you for entering and best of luck to you in the contest... Scott


    • Josy2
      October 26
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      Thanks a lot for the comments and the applauds.