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Cassette Tapes and Road Trips



Down highway 55 coming
out of Chicago
the radio plays Joe Cocker
covering a Beatles song,
my friend is struggling to
fix the cassette tape that
the player spewed out 
now, a well-wrinkled, unplayable
  Bowie song.

I’m watching the
telephone lines that
parallel the road
dip
and rise
pole to pole
the black lines glisten
in the moonlight
after the early fall rain.

I’m wondering
how many calls
are going through
those lines?
How many lovers
are calling
because they are
separated for one night?
How many arguments
are rattling the
copper wires?

We pass by
small towns with
odd names,
just a blink
on a highway sign.
The temperature is dropping
and we’re worried
about
black ice
and not making the concert
in Champaign.
It’s all about a girl
my buddy met
and her friends
from the sorority.
We’ll go coast to coast
to meet
girls.

There’s an accident
ahead,
we can see the
red and white lights
flashing from

a mile
away.
Cops have flares on the
road as
we pass by slowly,
turning down the
radio
to pay homage
to the crumpled cars.
No blood on the
highway,
no body parts in
plastic bags.
good signs.

We speed on
the telephone wires
dip and
rise
pole to pole
keeping up
with us the whole way.
Millions of calls
before the days
of cordless phones
before cell phones
before the over-ability
to communicate.

The Bowie tape
is ruined.
We hit the
black ice
doing about
seventy.
We spin,
bounce off a
guard rail and
careen sideways
across the
highway into the ditch,
smack-dab up against
a telephone pole.
We’d never
make Champaign
or the girls
and they would
never understand.


The phone lines
went on and on
down the highway
without us;
communicating a million
messages,
but we were

silent

not even the radio

would play.

 



 

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  • MissingBatteries
    October 27

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    I have officially read three of your poems now, and I am just in awe. Awe. I can't put my finger on what it is that I love about what I have read so far, but fantastic.


    • jazzcat gold member
      October 27
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      Thank you for your comments. I've read your work and to put you in "awe" makes me feel pretty grand. I appreciate you reading my work!


  • Suzianne
    October 27

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    Very Kerouackesque

    This is so 1950's On The Road...cool and relatable. I love it.

    One problem only I would notice, being an Illinois native who has traveled that way many times...Route 55 (formerly old Route 66) goes from Chicago to Springfield and beyond. Route 57 goes toward Champaign and on south to Memphis.


    • jazzcat gold member
      October 27
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      You're so right about 57...I've travelled 55 so much I practically forget there is another way to get south out of Chicago. I originally used Bloomington, but thought that a longer trip to Champaign would be better. Thanks so much for your comment!


  • Allyce May gold member
    October 26

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    Absolutely, you had me from "down" to "now" and I'm pretty sure I didn't blink There are very few poets I know who can write the starkness of life so bluntly yet poetically at the same time (if that makes sense) and even less that I'll take the time to read if their poems are more than a few stanzas! You have the ability to coalesce thought and reality though, and that's what makes me want to read life

    Totally loved it!

  • Rowan gold member
    October 26

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    I adored this. There's a few tweaks needed, but overall, this is really good.
    I'd lose the word 'now' at the end.
    But I have to say, overall you had/have me.
    Kathleen


    • jazzcat gold member
      October 27

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      Please feel free to IM me and let me know what "tweaks" you would suggest. I posted this at the end of the day yesterday after writing this on my lunch hour. I think I rushed it, so I'd be happy to edit. Thanks, as always for your support and friendship!

      • Rowan gold member
        October 27
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        I looked at it again this morning, and the tweaks are minor and could be just my way of speaking; losing some extra words; economizing, and I don't want to mess with your voice, you know? Sometimes because I would say something one way, doesn't necessarily make it the right way, or the best possibility.


  • stef-witt gold member
    October 26

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    You have an amazing gift for turning the every-day into poetry... telephone wires... wrinkled tape from a cassette... This is incredible! I'm going to post this comment now so I can go back and read it again...

    But before I do that, here is my favourite part -

    "How many arguments
    are rattling the
    copper wires?"

    Loved it.


  • januaryrain gold member
    October 26

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    Wow, I like it, another great write, where you make the reader feel as if they are there with you.
    Well done

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