Her house was made of glass because he wanted it that way,
to watch her every move from dawn 'til dusk.
She spent her lonely hours wandering from room to room,
occassionally nibbling on a rusk.
The perfect family you'd think, with everything she'd want,
a daughter bright and young who did not see
how underneath it all, in this disturbing crystal maze,
there lived a woman craving to be free.
He worked all day in court earning thousands by the hour,
condemning those who broke the golden rule.
Untarnished character who blazed a path for right and wrong,
but you would be mistaken or a fool.
Once home he'd check her moves, go through all receipts and bills,
make sure the towels were folded and not dropped.
Inspecting every inch of the tiles and the sink,
his search for her mistakes just never stopped.
The daughter did not know when he closed the bedroom door,
the beast that would exact harsh punishment.
That 'thing' he called his wife stiffled cries as he began
to 'tell' her what forgetting really meant.
Forgot to fold the towels wipe the sink and keep things neat,
forgot to place her brush a certain way,
forgot to say thankyou for the roses he had bought,
like many times before, she had to pay...
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If anybody was able to watch 'Criminal Justice' a few weeks ago you will know where I am coming from here.
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oh wow
this one hit me hard
The last line made me shiver.
It brought me tears
Thank you for this entry
good luck to you
keep the ink flowing
fire
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wow
very intresting, i thought this was well done,
thank you for entering and good luck
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"Forgot to fold the towels wipe the sink and keep things neat,
forgot to place her brush a certain way,
forgot to say thankyou for the roses he had bought,
like many times before, she had to pay..."
wow thats so sad this is such a sad poem aw that poor woman great poem -
What really strikes a chord is knowing that there will be women reading this that feel its autobiographical. Haunting and full of meaning, your words pack a powerful and realistic punch.
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I didn't watch the programme but this is a tale that is a terrible reality for some. It makes me wonder what goes on in some minds for people to become obsessive to the point of violence against others. It's a mad world we live in.
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this is terrifying....i didn't watch Criminal Justice but I don't think it's necessary to know what this is about - stark and chilling, Hilly...L
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good emotional and full of reality
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