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My grandmother was a beautiful woman and had rings people envied
deep down she was like a frozen lake in the winter time
each day grandma would carry on as if nothing was wrong
something happened after he pronounced her husband dead
her food was never warmed up again
the rings was used for rent
she tried to be brave and put on a show
but those pills could only hold her emotions in for so long
one day the lake cracked but it wasn't the type of sun you would except
making sure that she would be in her Sunday's best
those doses suddenly tripled
I tried so hard to understand why

how could you???
and I started feeling so very c o l d...

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  • Walking Oxymoron gold member
    November 18
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    I have to say that this write confused me slightly...
    I could be reading it wronmg, but what I got from this is that your grandma lost her husband (evident in the ...after he pronounced her husband dead) and she decided that although her front is saying 'I'm OK' she actually ended up committing suicide? Is that right?

    If so... I'm so sorry that you had to lose her...
    Thiswas a strong write... (even if mildly confusing in some ways)

    I wish you strength.


  • February Moon gold member
    October 27

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    This is really well written.